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Old 10-02-2013, 09:17 PM   #6
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Not bad cool quick little key here. Stayed on topic and kept it interesting. A bit basic in some parts but was made up with the content. I enjoyed this read, good flow, relative topic and good structure. Here's what I liked the most..

I know complaining is worthless
And I appear strange on the surface
But I'm goin insane, I'm nervous
I hope I can find a new brain for purchase....
I never fuckin claimed to be perfect
But shit, look what I became, I deserve this...

^^ was feeling this, good emotion here.

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And swallowed under a sea of tears
Compounded by weed and beers
And was only relieved through fear.
Now I've set the scene, it's clear
Gentlemen, defeat is near...
No. Fuck it I'm not all to blame.
When I saw this thing was cause to pain

^^ dope shit. Again, good emotion and kept the piece interesting to continue reading. Good work, keep dropping.
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