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So just found this in my notes. Not sure if I've posted this before. I'm high as fuck right now and hungover. But here ya go.
. . . Every time hell drops, I feel myself rot in shell shock We're all dealt shots, so rub it in, that helps lots! Fuck bell hops, I handle my own on this mantle of bones I mean, I used to be dope, seems the standard has grown Guess if you pen heart, then stop, it cancels 'em both Planet of ghosts. You see the river of lanterns that float? Fear & Loathing. Did too much, now ya stranded in foam Reaching out, dragging others down cuz you can't live alone Being real? That's a screaming deal like renting for quarters Sulk-Wise. Regrets of Hulk size, except the temper is shorter Just let me rot in these messy thoughts, this mental disorder 'Bout to spill my guts, carve the pumpkin. Got a pencil.. recorder? It'll be brief, I'll start now. It wasn't bleek, or dark out Was a night where something seemed to bring the stars down She was on a platter, apple/mouth, eat your heart out On some Myyy, What Big Teeth You Have.. Come close, grandma has some things she needs to ask A kiss? Cat woman's taser says it may be your last There's no rye to catch, so fuck that Holden freak Rhyme tragic, Titanic adopts the ocean deep Aiyo, God just spoke to me, said do the Morrison This day's old- eat peyote & chew/absorb it in Heard the darkest hour makes you use the torch within Until this little face turns blue, I'll forge a grin This noose is portioned thin - might give me a break Life's a strip club & the titty is fake. My, you're lippy today White Rabbit- I'm late, I'm late! & years are slipping away Fuck thinking of something witty to say Cuz even when it's all shitty & gray That means its wet, so her kitty can play But back to the layout of this crispy decay Welcome to hell, you kinda get used to this city of flames No smiles & laughs. No happiness, just piles of ash No light & no maps, only miles of black Dogma text- watch ya step on this tile of scabs
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This is fucking wildin
on some myyy, what big teeth you have who tf says that? Anyways, I'll feed more in depth later
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Strip club line was bananas in pajamas. Will come back to comment again
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damn. some dark surface shit with a lotta diff moods and imagery woven in. Very interesting read, especially for some shit u just stumbled on lol.
"Fuck bell hops, I handle my own on this mantle of bones I mean, I used to be dope, seems the standard has grown Guess if you pen heart, then stop, it cancels 'em both Planet of ghosts. You see the river of lanterns that float?" "Being real? That's a screaming deal like renting for quarters Sulk-Wise. Regrets of Hulk size, except the temper is shorter Just let me rot in these messy thoughts, this mental disorder 'Bout to spill my guts, carve the pumpkin. Got a pencil.. recorder?" this whole piece was worth a reread. props.
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tile of scabs. or scabs of tile?
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Shrooms are good. Yum.
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Glitchy distaste, equilibrium breaks mimic the shade that any distance replace, tripping, an eighth. Brittle erasers tracer demon, my face is leaking, creative genius, amazing sequence.. I can make your decade. Decadent, inseparable. Benjamin, careful in scarecrow circle, pulse is barely purple, terribly certain you aren't aware of your learning. Climb, while I stare at a virgin. I'm the bear to its burden..
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I mean, I used to be dope, seems the standard has grown
Guess if you pen heart, then stop, it cancels 'em both ^^ relatin to that shit a LOT also enjoyed the references to red riding hood, titanic, and catcher in the rye This noose is portioned thin - might give me a break --for some reason, really dug that. good shit All in all, like i've always said before, your reads are always a nice taste of thought. always brings my penning mood back, or at least provokes ideas for how i can be more creative in my own writing. every tiem i read your shit, i feel like i'm reaching into your mind while you're asleep and dreaming. it's always cool. thanks |
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holy shit. this is SO sick. best piece ive read in a while for sure. damn, seriously awesome. was gonna quote quotables but theres entirely too many to quote. sooooo fuckin original man. the way u word shit with ur puns and references, its a style all to urself, really dope.
used to be dope, standards grown..do the morrison, kitty can play... city of flames.. crispy decay, no rye to catch ha niceness Glitchy distaste, equilibrium breaks mimic the shade that any distance replace, tripping, an eighth. Brittle erasers tracer demon, my face is leaking, creative genius, amazing sequence.. I can make your decade. Decadent, inseparable. Benjamin, careful in scarecrow circle, pulse is barely purple, terribly certain you aren't aware of your learning. Climb, while I stare at a virgin. I'm the bear to its burden.. ^WOWOWOW fuck off with 2 awesome posts in one thread, ha my VOTM so far....8 days left to catch u... ahaa
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<3
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