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Join Date: Jul 2013
Posts: 269
Battle Record: 2-3
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yea jus start ya tomb .. cuz the talk of pulling heat causes doom
if its beef n 'stroganoff...it entered his mouth, n blew his noodle 'cross the room Dig the creativity here.. Nice opener its gotta suck being a coward but you got them clown components see dime hoes hit the club ,he shits bricks, builds a wall n becomes the flower on it Not really feeling here.. but i got ur girl face down son, its such a great outcome she fucked me n said Nothing Was The Same, U just whined all over it like Drakes album Good shot here... this lame spent 40 yrs breathing and nc is still featured on his homepage des lived long enough to answer age old questions ...but THAT just makes us question old age Good bar. Setup was better here than some of your others. im fire rapping, a hotdog drop brings that pyro factor im working the kinks out now, this old fuck gets his done by a chiropractor Same concept different way... feeling the bar above this better niks dope but u dont compare so im telling gramps quit des ur truly a man amongst boys... living out ur fantasies on some neverland shit I seen to many neverland bars in the days... it better be fire to land... and this didnt Overall: Your opener was a great start but then you seem to slack throughout the rest. This verse was pretty good highlighted by opener.. the first old age bar... Good stuff u won't be happy at the finish, cuz I'm on a mission to put hoes to rest the only 'Ven elation' we'll see is when des puts holes in his fucking chest I sense many people saying this is forced WP/NP. I usually put the T, herd with the T silent as well... I'll give you a decent opener des walks with three glocks, & u can see just how this desert e pops & when I drop the V, I'll leave him on endor man with the fucking ewoks Not digging this to much ur in a legend text crew which by definition means that now ur not running shit most black men are dead by 25, props on being one to put a 3 in front of it Seems vague.. IDK where the 35 comes into play? I'm old but ur old news, I stay ballin while u try to catch breath u like 2chainz... cuz that's how many it takes to fit round ur fat neck I like the creativity here, and its nice like the joke about fat chicks, & the trick to spot the bitch's pussy this cat has to roll his head in flour to find the wet spot to stick the cookie I give this an okay jab here.. creative, not strongest but decent not a good look, D, it's such a waist... It's time to stop, kid. I heard when that bitch from ur work spit in ur face, u said, 'mmmmm.... sausage...' Seems a rushed bar to finish to me Overall: Opener was decent, 2chains line was nice, and the cookie line was a decent jab. Your creativity is great, however, it seems like your lacking that sting. Your closer was rushed as well it seems... careful with the WP and it may being forced... Overall Vote: This was a hard one to edge out but Im giving it to Hotdog for a little bit more consistency/stronger hits. This could go either way from judgment on style.
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