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Old 07-23-2013, 01:42 PM   #11
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I read this a few times, connecting the dots. There are a lot of fragmented thoughts here, which required further examination. But there is a thread running through most of the verse, unifying a theme of self-definition and the emptiness of religion.

Individually, several of the lines stand out for wording alone:

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remapping Man's atlas with these blurry intestinal scars,
after perceiving the catch that there's no perspective to stars.
I took this to mean definition comes from within. Gazing at the sky will lead to a false view of the world. I really like it, and it took me a few reads to see how connected that couplet was.

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hide and seek, with phantom delinquents you've promised to find,
Humanity's essence- step forth and sink your omens in closeted light,
awake and question your passions before the Colossus can rise.
This is the strongest section of the verse. I love how you twisted your entire premise with the last phrase. Immediately after calling gods "phantom delinquents" and demanding a personal rejection of established belief, you warn that it's important to do those things before one of the oldest Greek gods can return. It reminds me of Homer Simpson's logic for not being religious: What if you're praying to the wrong God?
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