WEEK THIRTEEN CONTENDERS: DOMINATE (8-2) vs EVICTION (8-3) EVICTION WINS 3-0

[Rawn MD]

Honestly I wasn’t to impressed with either of these verses….

Eviction - Your story was pretty decent, however it didn’t seem natural really. The lines were more rhyme driven than content, and the story suffered from this. Like I felt it was verbose at times, and some lines were just there to rhyme, rather than convey a point. Also, I really didn’t see too many literary devices being used, which would have brought the story and content to another level in my opinion. The story was decent enough though that despite sometimes being to wordy, or in my opinion too long, it was still engaging, and held my attention.

Dominate - You kind of shot yourself in the foot imo. Had your verse had a little more effort you would have taken this, but it didn’t. Your flow was on point, and I did enjoy it, and felt maybe if you would have dropped some more wit, or displayed a little more skill as far as like metas, or alliteration, or something you could have taken this…. But I only really saw that in the end, which was kind of disappointing bc it shows you could have done that throughout the verse. Since that part was lacking I have to go story verse story, and your opponent just overpowered you there with lines, unfortunately. I kind of feel like you just keystyled this verse though, which left me wanting to see what would happen if you actually put more effort forth. You almost edged it though, you just didn’t give me enough style to overcome the barrage of lines and story Eviction brought.

Vote - Eviction