DEADMAN, as you were

[Split Eight]

Originally Posted by dead man

i spent a treasure for a better replacement. let me rephrase
i left heaven for a hell that embraced me. metal to grain
set in my ways. you can tell these wheels are freshly rotated
engineered to only be accessible wasted. as you were
as i've been. embarrassing to wake in a sweat
not remembering anything that i probably said

this is the good shit.


I really liked some of the vocab tossed around here, too. Not too out there, but on the periphery of commonplace. Relatable and familiar overall. The juxtaposition at the end was a little jarring and somewhat uncharacteristic. Not in a bad way, it just drew the eye.

keep writing