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sral · 11-13-2015, 10:52 AM

LOL

I liked the 1up idea, that was pretty fresh.

longs get smoked, marlboro was nice too. i enjoyed that.

MM line was cool

pretty good concepts and flow, just needs tightening up slightly

Flow is fire in that second around this section:

dang I'm fuckin vain, syringes can't equal to the god
still got dope tracks without the needle in the arm
won't hold back. The spine of my notepad is strong
this dumb era don't know bout a road map at all

rest was straight

i respect it

keep that pen moving!

11-13-2015, 10:52 AM	#7
sral LARSLARSLARSLARSLARS Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: CRUMPETVILLE Posts: 8,613 Battle Record: 28-3 Champed - Gimmick Battle League - The Winter Topical - Topical Martyrs - Lime Green Poetry Association - Lyric Olympics - Art of Writing League - Guerrilla Writing League (2x) - Black August II Rep Power: 85899396	LOL I liked the 1up idea, that was pretty fresh. longs get smoked, marlboro was nice too. i enjoyed that. MM line was cool pretty good concepts and flow, just needs tightening up slightly Flow is fire in that second around this section: dang I'm fuckin vain, syringes can't equal to the god still got dope tracks without the needle in the arm won't hold back. The spine of my notepad is strong this dumb era don't know bout a road map at all rest was straight i respect it keep that pen moving! __________________ - Netcees Rebuttal Tourney - Art of Writing League (x 4) - AOWL Season 11 Champion (Undefeated Season)