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Old 09-04-2014, 08:49 AM   #1
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Tossing the hair that framed her pallid cheeks,
“We’re off to the fair!” she claimed ecstatically.
Her name was Natalie. “Waddaya say?!”
I lay back passively, lost in her gaze.
“C’mon ‘cause we’re late!” I jumped to her side
where her mom was there waiting for us to arrive.
With a tut and a sigh and a slam of the door
Nat’s clutching me tight by the hand as we walk.
My eyes cast to the floor as we’re taking strides
until standing before us is a cascade of light.
Illuminated rides shriek upward and plummet
as Natalie takes her time to summon her courage.
She looks at me worried, pulls me next to herself,
as much for encouragement as anything else.
She leapt as a yell of giddy excitement
had then been dispelled by the kiddies behind us.
She was a little bit frightened but climbed up to pay
the ticket provider while the ride was delayed.
The silence became ever more harkening too
with what was lying in wait as we started to move.
Darkness consumed both carriage and track
and harsher it grew to a gradual black.
We were sat at the back with her mom to my left,
where Nat had me clasped, pushing onto her chest.
The fog up ahead disappearing from sight
as we plod through its dense cloud & veer to the right.
A mysterious light unveils a murderous scene
its appearance is frightening, Nat squirms in her seat.
Blood-curdling screams greet a bump in the road
and I’m hurled out of reach by the shuddering blow.
Squashed under its rolling wheels, with soft fur everywhere,
who will she cuddle at home, now Nat’s lost her Teddy Bear?
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