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Old 09-30-2013, 12:51 PM   #26
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I'll give constructive criticism without meaning to be a dick. The flow was good, but the problem I had with this was that you talked about shooting him and shit like that throughout the verse and only delivering a few punches. The punches you did do were ok considering the time restraints. Another thing, stop flailing your arms. That shit made me cringe honestly. If I was battling you I would bust out laughing if you flailed your arms like that. Js.
So my advice would be to stop telling people you'll shoot them and insult them more without flailing your arms.
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