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Old 06-27-2013, 06:34 PM   #1
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I'm the evil bastard baskin' with a hazard mask and a cape,
Mathematically equating gas attacks, caskets, laughin' and hate,
I'm happily fashioning fate; dismantling this race,
Egos follow the smoke to the skies and dissipate.
Open your eyes to the terror, the hatred, resentment,
It's this world's error that causes this plot, malevolence.
Take an expedition to this demolition, while I fly on suppressants,
And distinguish the fingers from the torso piles that are present.
Decimation of the nations, massacre master demolishment, slaughter,
Extermination of faces, mothers, brothers, whores and daughters,
The sins of the father obliterated the sons,
These motherfuckers scamper, it's human's habit to run.
These ants, repugnant pawns existent for the purpose of ONE,
It's calamitous, damnable, vile, villainous .. fun.

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Old 06-28-2013, 01:40 AM   #2
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I thought you used a good line opener to ya verse because this is what made me wanna keep reading. I like how you kept it interesting. You used some real good wordplay and some punchlines that were pretty good. It does however look a little rushed and feel as though if you had of took your time you could of made it better. But you made it entertaining for whatchu had. It wasn’t overwhelmingly dope, but it was still good nonetheless. Hopin to read some more from you some point down the road.
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Old 06-28-2013, 02:48 AM   #3
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its not bad i just hope your not using a rhyme dictionary!!
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