Unfukwitable 2-5 vs Og Smokinstein 0-2 - OG WINS BY NS

Sharp · 04-26-2016, 09:17 PM

NBL Season 9

Due FRIDAY
Extension will be given if asked due to late start. You MUST ask though.

Minimum - 10 lines
Max - 16 lines
Line limit can increase if both agree

NO biting
NO swaying
NO feeding
NO recycling
You must check in
Don't edit after your opponent has posted
2nd person to post can't edit after the first vote comes in
Don't be an idiot
Don't use your opponent's pic unless it's a pic battle
Agree on a line limit
May God have mercy on your souls

@Unfukwitable @Og smokinstein

Og smokinstein · 04-28-2016, 01:14 AM

How many bars??? @Unfukwitable?

Og smokinstein · 04-29-2016, 07:55 PM

Your verses put niggaz to sleep, you spread da zzzzzz quicker than the outbreak monkey.
Fucking flunky, u write nothing dope, last quote you had was from an insurance company.
Soon as I saw your name, I lost all motivation, to take part in this written altercation.
I got as much inspiration, for this to "workout" than a suicidal obese hospital patient.
I'm P.O'd cause you'll probably no-show, running from bars like you violated probation.
That jus means you a pacifist, who dreads-swinging like a couple fighting Haitians.

That's ok, I saw your bitch in the club, on the other side of the room just dancing.
She a slut bucket, no romancing, I just called her a-cross-fore-head like Charles manson.

Hopefully next time I get somebody... Who will make me write.

Kenny the OG · 05-01-2016, 10:57 PM

Your verses put niggaz to sleep, you spread da zzzzzz quicker than the outbreak monkey.
Fucking flunky, u write nothing dope, last quote you had was from an insurance company.
Ehh. I get it, it was almost funny but it didnt hit hard
Soon as I saw your name, I lost all motivation, to take part in this written altercation.
I got as much inspiration, for this to "workout" than a suicidal obese hospital patient.
Nah. Too much wording and u didn't have to put workout in quotes. The connection speaks for itself and tbh it was basis overall. No hate just my honest assessment
I'm P.O'd cause you'll probably no-show, running from bars like you violated probation.
That jus means you a pacifist, who dreads-swinging like a couple fighting Haitians.
prophetic bar. But still I'm just not a fan of the execution. Althiugh this concept could've been dope
That's ok, I saw your bitch in the club, on the other side of the room just dancing.
She a slut bucket, no romancing, I just called her a-cross-fore-head like Charles manson.
I read this in my Dot reach God voice. This is a reach

Idk fam tbh I'm just not a fan of how you're wording your setup/punches. Some of the concepts are oook but don't hit hard to me bc of how u executed it. But I can't hate tho because I'm a firm biever in everyone having their own style and thought process. Keep doing your thing but clean up that wording a bit.

Og smokinstein · 05-01-2016, 11:16 PM

My nigga...thx for the feedback but.
I jus wrote shit.. So i could get the w
I figured my opponet would be a no-show, since he didnt check in.

My shit was some bullshit indeed.
No need to waste good bars,when u know a nigga gonna no show

04-26-2016, 09:17 PM	#1
Sharp HE / HIM / FRAC Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: PA Posts: 11,592 Battle Record: 56-21 Accomplishments - 50+ Wins Champed - The Ultimate Writer - NBL Cypher - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 12601538	Unfukwitable 2-5 vs Og Smokinstein 0-2 - OG WINS BY NS NBL Season 9 Due FRIDAY Extension will be given if asked due to late start. You MUST ask though. Minimum - 10 lines Max - 16 lines Line limit can increase if both agree NO biting NO swaying NO feeding NO recycling You must check in Don't edit after your opponent has posted 2nd person to post can't edit after the first vote comes in Don't be an idiot Don't use your opponent's pic unless it's a pic battle Agree on a line limit May God have mercy on your souls @Unfukwitable @Og smokinstein

05-01-2016, 10:57 PM	#4
Kenny the OG tutankhamen Join Date: Mar 2016 Posts: 363 Battle Record: 6-5 Rep Power: 16107559	Your verses put niggaz to sleep, you spread da zzzzzz quicker than the outbreak monkey. Fucking flunky, u write nothing dope, last quote you had was from an insurance company. Ehh. I get it, it was almost funny but it didnt hit hard Soon as I saw your name, I lost all motivation, to take part in this written altercation. I got as much inspiration, for this to "workout" than a suicidal obese hospital patient. Nah. Too much wording and u didn't have to put workout in quotes. The connection speaks for itself and tbh it was basis overall. No hate just my honest assessment I'm P.O'd cause you'll probably no-show, running from bars like you violated probation. That jus means you a pacifist, who dreads-swinging like a couple fighting Haitians. prophetic bar. But still I'm just not a fan of the execution. Althiugh this concept could've been dope That's ok, I saw your bitch in the club, on the other side of the room just dancing. She a slut bucket, no romancing, I just called her a-cross-fore-head like Charles manson. I read this in my Dot reach God voice. This is a reach Idk fam tbh I'm just not a fan of how you're wording your setup/punches. Some of the concepts are oook but don't hit hard to me bc of how u executed it. But I can't hate tho because I'm a firm biever in everyone having their own style and thought process. Keep doing your thing but clean up that wording a bit. __________________ Wordplay? My words ain't meant to be played with.

04-28-2016, 01:14 AM	#2
Og smokinstein The Marathon Join Date: Sep 2015 Posts: 114 Battle Record: 3-4 Rep Power: 352399	How many bars??? @Unfukwitable?

04-29-2016, 07:55 PM	#3
Og smokinstein The Marathon Join Date: Sep 2015 Posts: 114 Battle Record: 3-4 Rep Power: 352399	Your verses put niggaz to sleep, you spread da zzzzzz quicker than the outbreak monkey. Fucking flunky, u write nothing dope, last quote you had was from an insurance company. Soon as I saw your name, I lost all motivation, to take part in this written altercation. I got as much inspiration, for this to "workout" than a suicidal obese hospital patient. I'm P.O'd cause you'll probably no-show, running from bars like you violated probation. That jus means you a pacifist, who dreads-swinging like a couple fighting Haitians. That's ok, I saw your bitch in the club, on the other side of the room just dancing. She a slut bucket, no romancing, I just called her a-cross-fore-head like Charles manson. Hopefully next time I get somebody... Who will make me write.

05-01-2016, 11:16 PM	#5
Og smokinstein The Marathon Join Date: Sep 2015 Posts: 114 Battle Record: 3-4 Rep Power: 352399	My nigga...thx for the feedback but. I jus wrote shit.. So i could get the w I figured my opponet would be a no-show, since he didnt check in. My shit was some bullshit indeed. No need to waste good bars,when u know a nigga gonna no show