gargamel

Geno · 05-18-2015, 10:30 PM

a violin sings my song, butterfly wings fall off
The walls bleed paint, stains, the tablecloths a loss
Moth balls scatter the staircase, a frantic life
Blowing bubbles shaped like the anti christ
Cancers quite comfortable, smoke a box
pol pots folgers crystals, snot by the polkadots
my colons rotten, toilette bowl full of molten lava
Ass burgers, the last word spoken today
Something decayed, thawing, hope for the flavor
The corpse is enormous, the shadow is in labor
A dark baby was born, africa needed neighbors
No favors, saliva gland dried at the core
put the bones back together, god has a warrior
deoxy rhibo nuecleic, dehydrated
Knee high from the basement, i am his agent
Cleaning supply in my thermos, comet, detergent
Vomit, a lifetime supply of insurance, its worth it
Babies wander the surface, carpet covered in mold
Gargle the gardeners toes, footsies, pussies
A deli***y in the mirror, looks to deceive
Green gook in the swimming pool, zippahead in the pond
genghis khan, mortar bombed, legends of nam
under the crocodiles smiles, dentistry by the buck
devil deep in the clutch, feeding it lunch
lochness demons, speachless, bleed from its tongue
little people, midgets, the evil has won

Mr. J · 05-20-2015, 10:56 PM

I lol'd at the tag..

either way I think this was an interesting twist from the other piece
the flow of this is quite consistent and is overall off kilter
it looks like you been spending time reading some of Wise's rhymes (haha)
otherwise it's nice to see drop more than one piece Geno
welcome back to the grindstone

Geno · 05-23-2015, 05:47 PM

For sure homie.
Just been playing around. Looking forward to vulgars tournament. been wanting to make a solid come back if only temporary. I think thats the spot for it

05-18-2015, 10:30 PM	#1
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	gargamel a violin sings my song, butterfly wings fall off The walls bleed paint, stains, the tablecloths a loss Moth balls scatter the staircase, a frantic life Blowing bubbles shaped like the anti christ Cancers quite comfortable, smoke a box pol pots folgers crystals, snot by the polkadots my colons rotten, toilette bowl full of molten lava Ass burgers, the last word spoken today Something decayed, thawing, hope for the flavor The corpse is enormous, the shadow is in labor A dark baby was born, africa needed neighbors No favors, saliva gland dried at the core put the bones back together, god has a warrior deoxy rhibo nuecleic, dehydrated Knee high from the basement, i am his agent Cleaning supply in my thermos, comet, detergent Vomit, a lifetime supply of insurance, its worth it Babies wander the surface, carpet covered in mold Gargle the gardeners toes, footsies, pussies A deli*y in the mirror, looks to deceive Green gook in the swimming pool, zippahead in the pond genghis khan, mortar bombed, legends of nam under the crocodiles smiles, dentistry by the buck devil deep in the clutch, feeding it lunch lochness demons, speachless, bleed from its tongue little people, midgets, the evil has won __________________ -A.bove T.he R.est**

05-20-2015, 10:56 PM	#2
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	I lol'd at the tag.. either way I think this was an interesting twist from the other piece the flow of this is quite consistent and is overall off kilter it looks like you been spending time reading some of Wise's rhymes (haha) otherwise it's nice to see drop more than one piece Geno welcome back to the grindstone __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

05-23-2015, 05:47 PM	#3
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	For sure homie. Just been playing around. Looking forward to vulgars tournament. been wanting to make a solid come back if only temporary. I think thats the spot for it __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*