anyone interested in reading/critiquing an essay I wrote?

oats · 03-15-2015, 01:55 AM

I'd really like to get as many perspectives on it as possible. It's decently long - 3400 words - so, if you are so kind as to read it, I don't expect lengthy feedback or anything, just tell me what you liked/didn't like and why.

I know I've been shitty about leaving feed for a lot of you, so I will gladly give you in-depth feedback for any piece you link me to before you get back to me about my piece. THAT'S MY WORD.

@Certain @Dancake @Vulgar @bane baby @Zen @Pent uP @Diode @zygote @dead man @uh-oh @NYCSPITZ @Eŋg @Witty @anyone and everyone else who might be interested. thanks

Vulgar · 03-15-2015, 01:57 AM

Sure

Zen · 03-15-2015, 02:09 AM

Sure

oats · 03-15-2015, 02:59 AM

Sent to both of you, much appreciated.

Witty · 03-15-2015, 05:08 AM

No!

Witty · 03-15-2015, 06:31 AM

Ok, I shall read ASAP :D

<3

NYCSPITZ · 03-15-2015, 12:27 PM

i got u

boof · 03-15-2015, 12:28 PM

sure

Eŋg · 03-15-2015, 05:50 PM

email it to me, i can have a look.

uh-oh · 03-15-2015, 09:33 PM

ill give it a shot if you still want feed

just know any critiques will be "feel" related seeing as i dropped out after failing the 9th grade twice.

oats · 03-15-2015, 10:33 PM

Sent to all of you, thanks again everyone.

PancakeBrah · 03-15-2015, 10:44 PM

Send it bruv.

Pharaohs Army · 03-16-2015, 12:35 AM

I will.
pharaohsarmy52@yahoo.com

Certain · 03-16-2015, 03:14 AM

What's it about?

oats · 03-16-2015, 03:55 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Certain

What's it about?

Dogs and humans. This is a much different/much more developed version of what I sent you a number of weeks ago.

Certain · 03-16-2015, 10:38 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by oats

Dogs and humans. This is a much different/much more developed version of what I sent you a number of weeks ago.

Then yes.

Dope girl · 03-16-2015, 08:02 PM

I'm in

Ghost1 · 03-16-2015, 08:46 PM

Sent

dead man · 03-16-2015, 09:03 PM

pm it

veritas · 03-16-2015, 09:21 PM

Pm to me.

03-15-2015, 01:55 AM	#1
oats Steel Cut Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 5,084 Battle Record: 19-10 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Fight Night LXXXIV - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 79005428	anyone interested in reading/critiquing an essay I wrote? I'd really like to get as many perspectives on it as possible. It's decently long - 3400 words - so, if you are so kind as to read it, I don't expect lengthy feedback or anything, just tell me what you liked/didn't like and why. I know I've been shitty about leaving feed for a lot of you, so I will gladly give you in-depth feedback for any piece you link me to before you get back to me about my piece. THAT'S MY WORD. @Certain @Dancake @Vulgar @bane baby @Zen @Pent uP @Diode @zygote @dead man @uh-oh @NYCSPITZ @Eŋg @Witty @anyone and everyone else who might be interested. thanks __________________ You should be water Last edited by oats; 03-15-2015 at 05:25 AM.

03-15-2015, 02:59 AM	#4
oats Steel Cut Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 5,084 Battle Record: 19-10 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Fight Night LXXXIV - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 79005428	Sent to both of you, much appreciated. __________________ You should be water

03-15-2015, 05:08 AM	#5
Witty Lime Life Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 16,978 Battle Record: 30-41 Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded Champed - Lyric Olympics - Summer Classic Rep Power: 85235118	No! __________________ He listens to voices inside of his mind Explicit and poisonous violent crime.

03-15-2015, 06:31 AM	#6
Witty Lime Life Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 16,978 Battle Record: 30-41 Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded Champed - Lyric Olympics - Summer Classic Rep Power: 85235118	Ok, I shall read ASAP :D <3 __________________ He listens to voices inside of his mind Explicit and poisonous violent crime.

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03-15-2015, 05:50 PM	#9
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	email it to me, i can have a look.

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uh-oh DA GOD Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Canton Ohio Posts: 12,362 Battle Record: 1-0 Champed - Beat Battle II - Beat Battle V - Beat Bags Rep Power: 84181420	ill give it a shot if you still want feed just know any critiques will be "feel" related seeing as i dropped out after failing the 9th grade twice. __________________ EVERYBODY I KNOW GOT WEED OR GOT POWDER BUT I AINT GOT EITHER. GOT ALOT OF DEMONS

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oats Steel Cut Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 5,084 Battle Record: 19-10 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Fight Night LXXXIV - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 79005428	Sent to all of you, thanks again everyone. __________________ You should be water

03-15-2015, 10:44 PM	#12
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03-16-2015, 12:35 AM	#13
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	I will. pharaohsarmy52@yahoo.com

03-16-2015, 03:14 AM	#14
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	What's it about?

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