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Willie O'Ree Jan.18 1958...
Can't believe they drafted me, NHL here I come I leave the venue, than to the parking lot there I run Fans protest, throwing debris... I'm feeling sick-and-rotten They scream, 'Stop playing hockey... go back to picking cotton' I wish my skin's forgotten, and we were looked as all equal Look at Jackie Robinson in baseball... Come on people My teammates lookin funny, gotta check my hotel rooms Can't sleep on the road, waking up hoping I don't smell fumes Cause they hate me like the fans, they just know how to hide it I'm just ready for my first game... and goal-I'm-excited They announce my name... boos from the stands, I just hope I rip Get on the ice... My fuckin teammates gave me a broken stick! I get another... Illegal hits from the opposite team To most this would be hell, but to me it's-not-it's-a-dream To them, I'm a runaway slave skating all on the ice They pick fights, but I been fighting my whole fuckin life Fight against racism, fight for the right to play hockey 95% blind in my right eye, not a night I'd play sloppy Played a few seasons scored some goals, but I take heed to say That now there's 25 black players that's in the league today |
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wow.
i actually learned something new today this was great fam..im sure you put it mad work and it shows. applause.
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Thanks fam... Honestly I rolled a joint up and worked on it for about an hour.. Did a lil research once I chose the topic and went from there
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Yupp that was a dope piece. As a Canadian who has played ice hockey for over a decade I applaud this! Excellent insight into a player who doesn't get the respect he deserves for the mark he will forever have left on the sport
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@Nigma fucking dope that you like hockey dude.. this site doesnt have enough hockey fans
thought this was entirely factual yet well-written, puts you in a particular perspective very well. look forward to seeing you in the league
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There were some very sexual lines that I enjoyed. Fans protest, throwing debris... I'm feeling sick-and-rotten They scream, 'Stop playing hockey... go back to picking cotton' They announce my name... boos from the stands, I just hope I rip Get on the ice... My fuckin teammates gave me a broken stick! I get another... Illegal hits from the opposite team To most this would be hell, but to me it's-not-it's-a-dream That bolded line reminded in my the song 'How They Want Me to Be' by Best Coast (check it out, it's a thumper!). Not in content, but in the fact that a phrase can be said a million times and still be fresh and meaningful if you fucking mean it, cunt. That bolded line read well to me, for reasons I cannot discern at the top layer of my brains. But it stuck out to me, so I bolded it. I know people have done lines with the exact same sentiment, but your wording and lead up and follow up, I don't know, it was the line of the drop and encapsulated the point of the whole thing. So good. The glossy eyed idealism in some of the lines left me almost eye rollish, though (smell fumes, the fight racism and fight to play hockey especially) but overall I can not say I did not like this. Although, the ending was weak to me. The real meat of this piece isn't that. And it come off slightly corny. I have a tendency to end my bullshit like that. Signs of dopage! That dash bullshit needs to stop though nigga.
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lol thanks for the feedback... That's how I right tho, helps the reader go with the flow easier, been doing it for years
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I'm never going to feed a piece of yours ever again.
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I'll never direct sexy lines at you again
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YOU TEASE
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