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08-21-2013, 03:42 AM
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ghost in the matrix
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Muse-ical
Pick you up, lay you down;
Never leave my mind so I stay around. I'd say I found what I've been looking for Since your the only girl I'll be cooking for. You're beautiful and you stole my heart, I've never felt like this...where do I start? Simplistic ideas and heartfelt emotions, The most devout devotion, more empowering than the oceans. Awe inspiring; you have what people desire to see, Pure innocence and joy when you smile at me. I don't require a beat to speak of the fires you've peaked, I admire you, see? Cuz I thought the walls around my heart could never be breached! You've given me strength I've never been witnessed to have, Until you came into my life...and made me a dad. Aaliyah Cassandra, my beautiful girl, Thank you for changing my views of the world. There's not a poem I could write or a scheme I could use, That could describe how much I love you, You inspire me; my Muse.
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08-21-2013, 07:24 PM
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rhyme capsule.
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how did u get published.
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08-22-2013, 01:42 AM
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ghost in the matrix
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You weren't my critic
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08-22-2013, 11:18 AM
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one word
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08-22-2013, 11:41 AM
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ghost in the matrix
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I think ya'll looking for something that I ain't put in this. Simplicity is all I put in this its for a baby
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08-22-2013, 11:48 AM
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i aint looking for nothing nigga, & i can appreciate simplicity
but by your own admission if that "all" you put in this...the fuck you was expecting? its like a nigga who wasnt having a baby could've wrote this shit...i give a fuck if you get what im sayin truly...but dont kid yourself thinking im looking for something that aint there...i express wdeva vibe i get off your piece...& i felt generic summed it up enough. i guess not. #1 |
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