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_Al_GO_RYTHMIC
Join Date: May 2013
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I'm spitting script
they picket an pick at the way I come ripping it your chick can get off my dick I've been gettin them they're finger lickin just pecking an gaggle and gag on it while I dibble dabble an put swag on it I'm like Shaq your the back on it broke shattered like glass I'm smashing gripped on lid rap something I have passion in I write off trash an compose like I'm trashing men think quick fast like the flash when I pass women they whirl gasp an grab the wind but when my balls itch I still scratch their chin I write to enlighten but fight to find light within to untype the rights of what has been written waves an signals all in rhythm deifying it's magnetism seeing the youth has risen another youthanism in the booth a prison another visual prism of the roots of missing unrudimentary jumping switching finding case trace of clueless mission its without inhibition each have peace without it piece of their soul is missing
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V.V
Join Date: Sep 2013
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This started of shallow and got deeper as it went on. I like ur writing style format. Its jolting in a nagging way, but it makes you stand out well. Just develop ur scheme into a crisper setup and be more deliberate with your train-of-thought drops and i think you'll be straight. Keep it up scrip.
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Join Date: Jul 2013
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This is aight...a little bland for my likin' tbh, really hate the way you've structured it as it reads very stop/start to me also but whatevers...I was definitely feelin' the second half of the verse more so than the first and you did have a couple lines scattered amongst this that I liked, unfortunately though they were few and far between to make this some mind blowin' piece...no hate, still enjoyed what you penned here man.
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