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Scripter 01-01-2014 08:12 PM

Scriptited
 
I'm spitting script
they picket
an pick at
the way I come
ripping it
your chick
can get off my dick
I've been gettin them
they're finger lickin
just pecking an
gaggle and gag on it
while I dibble dabble
an put swag on it
I'm like Shaq
your the back on it
broke shattered like glass
I'm smashing gripped on lid
rap something I have passion in
I write off trash
an compose like
I'm trashing men
think quick fast
like the flash
when I pass women
they whirl gasp an grab the wind
but when my balls itch
I still scratch their chin
I write
to enlighten
but fight to
find light within
to untype the rights of
what has been written
waves an signals all in rhythm
deifying it's magnetism
seeing the youth has risen
another youthanism
in the booth a prison
another visual prism
of the roots of missing
unrudimentary jumping
switching finding case
trace of clueless mission
its without inhibition
each have peace
without it
piece
of their soul is missing

e11even 01-02-2014 01:48 AM

This started of shallow and got deeper as it went on. I like ur writing style format. Its jolting in a nagging way, but it makes you stand out well. Just develop ur scheme into a crisper setup and be more deliberate with your train-of-thought drops and i think you'll be straight. Keep it up scrip.

Exis 01-02-2014 08:52 AM

This is aight...a little bland for my likin' tbh, really hate the way you've structured it as it reads very stop/start to me also but whatevers...I was definitely feelin' the second half of the verse more so than the first and you did have a couple lines scattered amongst this that I liked, unfortunately though they were few and far between to make this some mind blowin' piece...no hate, still enjoyed what you penned here man.

Stay upwards.


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