... but doctor, I am Pagliacci.

dull boy · 09-12-2013, 11:27 PM

Emotional arches. Plucking the strings.
I wrote on your heart with something I'd seen
in a poster. That's art. It's nothing it seems.
Focus the scar for upcoming scenes.
Show me bizarre. Nudge me and wink...
you fake lying fuck. Hey dad, at night when I cry,
I often wonder how you neglected to mention how life is a lie.
I mean come on, that's pertinent, yes?
Well, now I'm hurting. You're dead.
I know, I know, haven't we heard this verse? In my head.
Always nervous. A wreck.
I know it isn't cool. How's a person forget?
Teach me. I'd learn all the steps.
I sip these drinks so memories don't seem so personal. Less
terminal. Check. Pawn to d-8.
So soft, yea she's great. What's wrong with these dames
wanting to talk to me? They must be off, but seem sane.
@PancakeBrah

Neighbor · 09-13-2013, 12:21 AM

Awfully strange, like a lobotomy. Brain leaking honesty. Wait,
I'm off in these dazes, while I subconsciously strain. Launching grenades.
Dreams? Naw, each thought's a freeze frame of me palming these
Glocks in each take. Awkwardly pace, back & forth w/ these gauges.
I sawed off a piece. Stop tryna talk to me, I'm already late.
Just want a clean slate... Errr, coffin. I'm authoring fate.
Life's like a quarantined state, just waiting for death...
Aimed at my chest & left my pajama's sleeve stained.

Good shit, Dally.. I liked it

BWHAHA · 09-13-2013, 01:23 AM

lol

oats · 09-13-2013, 03:15 AM

you fake lying fuck. Hey dad, at night when I cry,
I often wonder how you neglected to mention how life is a lie.
I mean come on, that's pertinent, yes?
Well, now I'm hurting. You're dead.
I know, I know, haven't we heard this verse? In my head.

this is the type of writing that really hits me. it's raw, honest, and poignantly scathing. make this longer

Wise Wiggles · 09-14-2013, 02:44 PM

dope, deep, simple, everything.

CopyPat · 09-14-2013, 05:34 PM

Neighbors verse > dull boys

haha jk. tie, dead tie

both awesome, dead awesome.

post more @ both

Mr. J · 09-17-2013, 06:35 PM

This shit was deep in the few words brought
you captured the essence of poetic interpretation
it shines throughout the verse adding a dark feel
a menacing feel at that, so much to so little
write more and add a little rain to the day

Dove Dozer · 09-17-2013, 07:59 PM

Man this was dope. I loved this all the way through. Simple but yet you said so much. Emotion was what really captured my attention.

you fake lying fuck. Hey dad, at night when I cry,I often wonder how you neglected to mention how life is a lie.I mean come on, that's pertinent, yes?Well, now I'm hurting. You're dead.I know, I know, haven't we heard this verse? In my head.Always nervous. A wreck.I know it isn't cool. How's a person forget?

Wow. So dope

PancakeBrah · 09-17-2013, 08:09 PM

seems like something i'd write

09-12-2013, 11:27 PM	#1
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,053 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345604	... but doctor, I am Pagliacci. Emotional arches. Plucking the strings. I wrote on your heart with something I'd seen in a poster. That's art. It's nothing it seems. Focus the scar for upcoming scenes. Show me bizarre. Nudge me and wink... you fake lying fuck. Hey dad, at night when I cry, I often wonder how you neglected to mention how life is a lie. I mean come on, that's pertinent, yes? Well, now I'm hurting. You're dead. I know, I know, haven't we heard this verse? In my head. Always nervous. A wreck. I know it isn't cool. How's a person forget? Teach me. I'd learn all the steps. I sip these drinks so memories don't seem so personal. Less terminal. Check. Pawn to d-8. So soft, yea she's great. What's wrong with these dames wanting to talk to me? They must be off, but seem sane. @PancakeBrah Last edited by dull boy; 09-13-2013 at 10:41 PM.

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Neighbor Genghis Khan Vuitton Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,303 Battle Record: 30-10 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Pic Key Grand Prix - 1-2 Season 1 - Newbie Tournament II - Fight Night LXII - Fight Night XLII - Fight Night XXXIII - Fight Night XXVI - BA Swag & Flow - 1-2 Punch League (2x) - Netcees Battle League(2x) - BA Slugfest II - Fight Night of Champions - Fight Night LXXXIII - Summer Classic X Rep Power: 34764471	Awfully strange, like a lobotomy. Brain leaking honesty. Wait, I'm off in these dazes, while I subconsciously strain. Launching grenades. Dreams? Naw, each thought's a freeze frame of me palming these Glocks in each take. Awkwardly pace, back & forth w/ these gauges. I sawed off a piece. Stop tryna talk to me, I'm already late. Just want a clean slate... Errr, coffin. I'm authoring fate. Life's like a quarantined state, just waiting for death... Aimed at my chest & left my pajama's sleeve stained. Good shit, Dally.. I liked it __________________ Even signing my autograph’s like writing a slaughter pact Last edited by Neighbor; 09-13-2013 at 07:52 AM.

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oats Steel Cut Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 5,084 Battle Record: 19-10 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Fight Night LXXXIV - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 79005428	you fake lying fuck. Hey dad, at night when I cry, I often wonder how you neglected to mention how life is a lie. I mean come on, that's pertinent, yes? Well, now I'm hurting. You're dead. I know, I know, haven't we heard this verse? In my head. this is the type of writing that really hits me. it's raw, honest, and poignantly scathing. make this longer __________________ You should be water

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CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	Neighbors verse > dull boys haha jk. tie, dead tie both awesome, dead awesome. post more @ both __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.

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BWHAHA Sophomore Member Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 176 Rep Power: 4754293	lol

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Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	This shit was deep in the few words brought you captured the essence of poetic interpretation it shines throughout the verse adding a dark feel a menacing feel at that, so much to so little write more and add a little rain to the day __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

09-17-2013, 07:59 PM	#8
Dove Dozer loose leaf bruce lee Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,077 Battle Record: 7-6 Rep Power: 1853216	Man this was dope. I loved this all the way through. Simple but yet you said so much. Emotion was what really captured my attention. you fake lying fuck. Hey dad, at night when I cry,I often wonder how you neglected to mention how life is a lie.I mean come on, that's pertinent, yes?Well, now I'm hurting. You're dead.I know, I know, haven't we heard this verse? In my head.Always nervous. A wreck.I know it isn't cool. How's a person forget? Wow. So dope __________________

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PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	seems like something i'd write __________________ Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder