10.16.20

Pharaohs Army · 10-19-2020, 06:08 PM

Was that a misclick? Write sick shit. Always up to mischief.
Tote the biscuit. You’re a dipshit, with lipstick.
Smokin’ indo. You’re a bimbo. You’re in limbo. Slice like Kimbo.
I’m ancient. Explain my greatness. Explain how I shape-shift. Every rhyme is simply makeshift.
Tongue twistin’ like you ate shit. And ain’t shit.
Yo I don’t fake it. This loss you’re gonna HAVE to take it.
Back to basics, cut the track.
What the fuck was that? 1 take. Like I was up to bat.
Tote the gat. Squeeze the nina. Iceman. Store the body in a freezah.
Cleaning up the blood is for the housekeeper.
I CAN be meaner.
Kidnap your dope boy runners call me the street sweeper.
Sellin’ E & H, Sellin’ the trees & shake.
Oh what a day the lovely seasons make.
Let the bass make your body quake.
It’s a holiday, get to the bars & clubs with the molly mang.

Capital J · 10-19-2020, 07:49 PM

I liked it. You seem to have a good structure. The first half flowed very smooth. Nice man.

Dope girl · 10-20-2020, 10:59 PM

Illest rhyme your ever spit
Slick lines

dead man · 10-25-2020, 05:43 PM

raw

Dimand Emreld · 10-26-2020, 12:15 AM

Listen kid... im angry like seclusion patients
I read ya verse, my time was wasted, electricity 400 kilowats wasted
I'm going platnum off this text shit
Tell the mods I cil people, I need to be encarcerated
I live my life lonely, I don't like to play wit kids
so I spit these bars at the Pharoahs Army
you shouldn't of ualked through uen the waters split like Moses
I should be in Leviticus, Dimand da Sorcer

....listen kid I pay rent, utilities , im on SNAP food card.
I need my money.

Eŋg · 11-04-2020, 12:33 PM

tough in places - sophomoric in others.

the good outweighed the bad, though.

solid overall.

Pharaohs Army · 11-04-2020, 04:48 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Eŋg

tough in places - sophomoric in others.

the good outweighed the bad, though.

solid overall.

Thanks. Just a free focused on the rhyming. Subject matter of murder and drugs is sophomoric but I wasn't trying for anything deep. Glad to see you can judge each piece individually.

Pakistani Hand Cannon · 11-10-2020, 01:37 AM

my bad, that was a typo on my Eng account

i meant to say this was garbage juice

didnt read past write sick shit

House of Leaves · 05-15-2023, 02:51 AM

@Pharaohs Army
YOU WANNA EVER ... You wanna ever come back buddy yeah Polish Up ur ShitFEed wonderboy
This how you @effiency. ,, THIS guy only back if Staff keep in line? na PA u good just fix

10-19-2020, 06:08 PM	#1
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	10.16.20 Was that a misclick? Write sick shit. Always up to mischief. Tote the biscuit. You’re a dipshit, with lipstick. Smokin’ indo. You’re a bimbo. You’re in limbo. Slice like Kimbo. I’m ancient. Explain my greatness. Explain how I shape-shift. Every rhyme is simply makeshift. Tongue twistin’ like you ate shit. And ain’t shit. Yo I don’t fake it. This loss you’re gonna HAVE to take it. Back to basics, cut the track. What the fuck was that? 1 take. Like I was up to bat. Tote the gat. Squeeze the nina. Iceman. Store the body in a freezah. Cleaning up the blood is for the housekeeper. I CAN be meaner. Kidnap your dope boy runners call me the street sweeper. Sellin’ E & H, Sellin’ the trees & shake. Oh what a day the lovely seasons make. Let the bass make your body quake. It’s a holiday, get to the bars & clubs with the molly mang.

10-25-2020, 05:43 PM	#4
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,485 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606679	raw __________________ Zack Wicks for president

10-26-2020, 12:15 AM	#5
Dimand Emreld Junior Member Join Date: Oct 2020 Location: Puzzle Posts: 17 Rep Power: 0	Listen kid... im angry like seclusion patients I read ya verse, my time was wasted, electricity 400 kilowats wasted I'm going platnum off this text shit Tell the mods I cil people, I need to be encarcerated I live my life lonely, I don't like to play wit kids so I spit these bars at the Pharoahs Army you shouldn't of ualked through uen the waters split like Moses I should be in Leviticus, Dimand da Sorcer ....listen kid I pay rent, utilities , im on SNAP food card. I need my money. Last edited by Dimand Emreld; 10-26-2020 at 01:18 AM.

10-19-2020, 07:49 PM	#2
Capital J Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2019 Posts: 4 Rep Power: 0	I liked it. You seem to have a good structure. The first half flowed very smooth. Nice man.

10-20-2020, 10:59 PM	#3
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,789 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521419	Illest rhyme your ever spit Slick lines

11-04-2020, 12:33 PM	#6
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	tough in places - sophomoric in others. the good outweighed the bad, though. solid overall.

11-10-2020, 01:37 AM	#8
Pakistani Hand Cannon Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 1,230 Rep Power: 5303583	my bad, that was a typo on my Eng account i meant to say this was garbage juice didnt read past write sick shit

05-15-2023, 02:51 AM	#9
House of Leaves Banned Join Date: Sep 2016 Location: reality Posts: 165 Rep Power: 0	@Pharaohs Army YOU WANNA EVER ... You wanna ever come back buddy yeah Polish Up ur ShitFEed wonderboy This how you @effiency. ,, THIS guy only back if Staff keep in line? na PA u good just fix