coarse slate

[brokenhal0]

your core shakes a bitter pill to swallow
like your moms after she divorced late
coarse slate the edge is steep and below is lost faith
your tuff talk taint judgement comes from above
when the horns whistle your deaf to the inner teacher
a know it all...who only holds the walls up...
to support the hidden creatures
ill tame you...drench you in gasoline
light a flame and send you back to ashes you came too
opinions suck your dualistic external views still give a fuck
plagued by a mind full of chatter chattering back
poison reasoning with blind logic that didnt matter a fact
battering back billy jack attitude stand tall when the cokes flat
straight bubblin laugh at those who try to say somthing when
its utter rubbish cluttering hidden motives swept under the rug again
but my floors hardwood a***ia style covenant arc a sound
where termite mounds stood feed the queen your subconscious
overrun by clowned hoods with red eyes dragons of time
before the shroud fell i teach you sumthing sublime cryptic
hieroglyphics with words a real mystic not cheap juice
growing growths on your heart every motive that deceives truth
they constantly throwing some hooks compassion beyond the feather body
its a hobby for me to keep you so called veterans shook with your testament book
this not bible bashing passion of christ pants saggin askin advice from a bandwagon
wagon abandoned his life on the lamp with no light frost bite fashion
my expansion is a glass of moonshine with no ice...
a cold life as a cold knife cuts your dinners throat you provoke the masters
like you hold mics asshole its a pit with rose spikes azazel flees
from my thanos rings control your demons on those playdough strings
cause your intestines are a stagnant moat lessons are cooked
i learned to love on a opposite plane earthly realms are to solid
and every market wants to harvest your pain....

[Wise Wiggles]

Nice to see your work again bro

Stay wicked

[Razah]

Yo, the rhyme scheme on this was pretty dope. I liked how you kept switching it out every now & then, even though the last bar didn't rhyme with the rhyme before, the internal you started the bar with and finished with kept the flow smooth.

I felt like there were parts where I could rap this, but then the flow would switch up. I dunno if that makes sense to you... I rap these verses out loud and try to find like, what kind of bpm you spit the verse at. There were times where it was on point, then other times where it fell off "beat"

Good verse though, enjoyable read.

[Mr. J]

I must be too tired, I didn't really catch the flow of this piece
I can see how you worked out the verse and it is a decent switch up
the unusual is quite a tool in the right hands, and you handle your own most of the time
the verse was enjoyable upon a second and third reading to understand how you were doing this.
the internals worked fine to make the rhyme work itself out
maybe it's just me that felt kind of funny reading this..
I feel like I'd need to be high and drunk to fully comprehend the work here
otherwise, I feel when stepping out the norm, you shouldn't go too far
play the fence a bit, either way keep dropping man

[brokenhal0]

yea pretty much a person needs to be on somthin for this shit to rock if you say it backwards starting from the last sentence up it still rhymes and forms a different vibe for the song and if you do that shit while standing between 2 mirrors candy man appears real shit....


its all love tho i love you nikkaz for reading
this shit