Now.

Listen · 09-29-2014, 04:22 PM

Beautiful,

Why is tango for the skilled?
A long stare is an adequate response.
Don’t say what you feel, because faith only tends to pardon wrongs,
once a century.

It seems to be a tendency to speak our minds
only seconds before the sand stream leans on one end of
the hourglass.

I see the hours pass.

I work a nine to five, so I can five your nine.
What’s mine was mine, until I shared my mind.

Love is logical,
because I love your logic. Your way with words?
Well, thats worth the weight of pearls.

Frame a beating heart,
and watch the beating stop.

Pictures are forever, take one,
capture the moment and become a prisoner of time.
Right now seems amazing, living it once is fine.

Inno · 09-29-2014, 06:40 PM

This was good. Enjoyed the poetic vibe. Keep posting.

Wise Wiggles · 09-29-2014, 06:53 PM

Word. Liked this shit.

AndyHiro · 09-29-2014, 06:58 PM

This is ok to me. Although if it were an audio it's not something I would bump in my car or like put on my playlist but as something that I can read in less than a minute, it was worth the time. Not gonna lie tho didn't understand some parts at all like the tango line or faith century line or the nine to five to nine line I have no idea what you are saying.

The rest is fire tho. Keep writing.

theMuzzl3 · 09-30-2014, 05:22 AM

Beautiful.

Words spun in different directions, and yet the wording contained the same words in differed tenses. Good read.

Listen · 10-02-2014, 01:25 AM

Thanks chaps.

And @andy -

Tango is universally recognized for being one of the most complex dances... parallel to the complexities of love... so why is tango/love for the skilled?

Pardon wrongs once a century... mistakes are not to be constantly forgiven and almost never forgotten... Pick them wisely...

And I work a nine to five (work) so I can five your nine (sexually explicit ... 5 being your hand and a 9 as in a rating being the woman... etc)

AndyHiro · 10-02-2014, 01:58 AM

I reread it. I still don't really get it. Keep doing your thing tho.

Mitch · 10-02-2014, 05:58 AM

capture the moment and become a prisoner of time.
yes yes yesssss, be water my friend,
yes yessss very good

sral · 10-02-2014, 09:34 AM

this Listen aka Chicken etc?

dull boy · 10-02-2014, 10:15 AM

Dope.

09-29-2014, 04:22 PM	#1
Listen Member Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 41 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 3760711	Now. Beautiful, Why is tango for the skilled? A long stare is an adequate response. Don’t say what you feel, because faith only tends to pardon wrongs, once a century. It seems to be a tendency to speak our minds only seconds before the sand stream leans on one end of the hourglass. I see the hours pass. I work a nine to five, so I can five your nine. What’s mine was mine, until I shared my mind. Love is logical, because I love your logic. Your way with words? Well, thats worth the weight of pearls. Frame a beating heart, and watch the beating stop. Pictures are forever, take one, capture the moment and become a prisoner of time. Right now seems amazing, living it once is fine.

09-29-2014, 06:53 PM	#3
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,505 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788022	Word. Liked this shit. __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

10-02-2014, 05:58 AM	#8
Mitch Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2013 Location: Canada Posts: 160 Rep Power: 2208351	capture the moment and become a prisoner of time. yes yes yesssss, be water my friend, yes yessss very good __________________ Soundcloud.com/TheDirtySerpent

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sral LARSLARSLARSLARSLARS Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: CRUMPETVILLE Posts: 8,605 Battle Record: 28-3 Champed - Gimmick Battle League - The Winter Topical - Topical Martyrs - Lime Green Poetry Association - Lyric Olympics - Art of Writing League - Guerrilla Writing League (2x) - Black August II Rep Power: 85899396	this Listen aka Chicken etc? __________________ - Netcees Rebuttal Tourney - Art of Writing League (x 4) - AOWL Season 11 Champion (Undefeated Season)

09-29-2014, 06:40 PM	#2
Inno Ad mini tator Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 10,024 Battle Record: 26-54 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - Black August - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 85899403	This was good. Enjoyed the poetic vibe. Keep posting.

09-29-2014, 06:58 PM	#4
AndyHiro Yeah Im kinda like that Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 107 Rep Power: 0	This is ok to me. Although if it were an audio it's not something I would bump in my car or like put on my playlist but as something that I can read in less than a minute, it was worth the time. Not gonna lie tho didn't understand some parts at all like the tango line or faith century line or the nine to five to nine line I have no idea what you are saying. The rest is fire tho. Keep writing.

10-02-2014, 01:25 AM	#6
Listen Member Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 41 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 3760711	Thanks chaps. And @andy - Tango is universally recognized for being one of the most complex dances... parallel to the complexities of love... so why is tango/love for the skilled? Pardon wrongs once a century... mistakes are not to be constantly forgiven and almost never forgotten... Pick them wisely... And I work a nine to five (work) so I can five your nine (sexually explicit ... 5 being your hand and a 9 as in a rating being the woman... etc)

10-02-2014, 01:58 AM	#7
AndyHiro Yeah Im kinda like that Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 107 Rep Power: 0	I reread it. I still don't really get it. Keep doing your thing tho.

10-02-2014, 10:15 AM	#10
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,053 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345604	Dope.