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Listen 09-29-2014 04:22 PM

Now.
 
Beautiful,

Why is tango for the skilled?
A long stare is an adequate response.
Don’t say what you feel, because faith only tends to pardon wrongs,
once a century.

It seems to be a tendency to speak our minds
only seconds before the sand stream leans on one end of
the hourglass.

I see the hours pass.

I work a nine to five, so I can five your nine.
What’s mine was mine, until I shared my mind.

Love is logical,
because I love your logic. Your way with words?
Well, thats worth the weight of pearls.

Frame a beating heart,
and watch the beating stop.

Pictures are forever, take one,
capture the moment and become a prisoner of time.
Right now seems amazing, living it once is fine.

Inno 09-29-2014 06:40 PM

This was good. Enjoyed the poetic vibe. Keep posting.

Wise Wiggles 09-29-2014 06:53 PM

Word. Liked this shit.

AndyHiro 09-29-2014 06:58 PM

This is ok to me. Although if it were an audio it's not something I would bump in my car or like put on my playlist but as something that I can read in less than a minute, it was worth the time. Not gonna lie tho didn't understand some parts at all like the tango line or faith century line or the nine to five to nine line I have no idea what you are saying.

The rest is fire tho. Keep writing.

theMuzzl3 09-30-2014 05:22 AM

Beautiful.

Words spun in different directions, and yet the wording contained the same words in differed tenses. Good read.

Listen 10-02-2014 01:25 AM

Thanks chaps.

And @andy -

Tango is universally recognized for being one of the most complex dances... parallel to the complexities of love... so why is tango/love for the skilled?

Pardon wrongs once a century... mistakes are not to be constantly forgiven and almost never forgotten... Pick them wisely...

And I work a nine to five (work) so I can five your nine (sexually explicit ... 5 being your hand and a 9 as in a rating being the woman... etc)

AndyHiro 10-02-2014 01:58 AM

I reread it. I still don't really get it. Keep doing your thing tho.

Mitch 10-02-2014 05:58 AM

capture the moment and become a prisoner of time.
yes yes yesssss, be water my friend,
yes yessss very good

sral 10-02-2014 09:34 AM

this Listen aka Chicken etc?

dull boy 10-02-2014 10:15 AM

Dope.


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