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Join Date: May 2013
Location: MI
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Was a free bird caught up in a web of lies
Hearts break apart never equally divide Said from the start no more damaging my pride Based on my past can't let another nigga slide My unfortunate luck attracts torturous love white lies transform into black contorted bluffs Distorted lust broke down the forted trust I think I've had enough I think it's addin up All the hurt and pain aside mentally I don't have the time And even tho I love the way you grind can't bring myself to cross that line You know the old saying all men lie Can't fall in too deep ya guaranteed to drown Stick ya toe in guaranteed your pulled down Play the love game guaranteed ya done foul Wow let me slow down with the dramatics I mean I know what love is and I think that it's tragic But still... Doesn't mean I feel nothing for you Doesn't mean what your sayin is true How can you keep us together if I'm missin a screw? How can i trust you'll fix me if I'm outta the glue... cuz i don't have a clue... the more i let you in, the more i might break the more you give in, the more i can't take... my unfortunate luck attracts torturous love So.. We can fuck but not make love
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Kill.It.Nonstop
Join Date: Jun 2014
Posts: 666
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lil' Hook at the end is catchy I can see that on a r&b type track thought this stared dope...gotta lil' "cliche" near the end with some typical lines you would expect in a piece like this....
examples... But still... Doesn't mean I feel nothing for you Doesn't mean what your sayin is true How can you keep us together if I'm missin a screw? How can i trust you'll fix me if I'm outta the glue... thought if you strayed away from stuff like this it woulda been a lil' hotter.. cuz at the beginnin' u had shit like this.... My unfortunate luck attracts torturous love white lies transform into black contorted bluffs ^^Thats crazy... just kinda lost its consistency...woulda liked to see it all on that level of writing.. But not takin' anything away... flowed smooth as hell HoLLa |
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