Your execution?

Vulgar · 07-02-2014, 10:52 PM

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PancakeBrah · 07-03-2014, 07:23 AM

As the years tally, I'm feeling younger which I'm beginning to like
Never mistake hard work, dedication & discipline for the elixir of life
This is a chess man's game, take it from the old spider -
Yes, the soul tires, but the competition still burns in his eyes like coal fires

Life isn't meant to be all jolly and grand
I remember sitting by my trainer's deathbed, he was watching me dance

I liked these the most.

Everything was good, though. Different than what I'm used to from you. Or maybe I just haven't been reading many open mics lately and my memory's a bit fuzzy. The rhymes seemed to come more rapidly than I in your other pieces. Quick combos to the body instead of haymakers that throw my brain for a loop. The content was on point, nailed the topic you were aiming for. Touched on some larger ideas while using your topic as the symbol.

Cool piece. Nice to see you writing about "smaller" stuff, if that makes sense.

Vulgar · 07-04-2014, 04:10 PM

Thanks padre.

Kin · 07-07-2014, 11:57 AM

Daaaaamn....the smoothness of thiz was whoa!!!.. may be the best flowin piece ive read on this site so far

Talented writer right here...respect is due

Dope story also...gonna be on the look out for more from u

HoLLa

Eŋg · 07-08-2014, 01:08 AM

i enjoyed this quite a bit. definitely more economic from you with a centralized concept. i probably haven't seen you write like this before? it's in a more 'common' vein but still holds your own personality. b-hop doesn't really stop guys anymore; it's his wily craft as a veteran that sees him succeed. the hoplite line was clever. it's also the name of a game i really like by magma fortress.

anyway this was a nice ode (if you could call it that). wordddddddddd.

07-02-2014, 10:52 PM	#1
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	Your execution? B Last edited by Vulgar; 12-06-2021 at 11:19 AM.

07-03-2014, 07:23 AM	#2
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	As the years tally, I'm feeling younger which I'm beginning to like Never mistake hard work, dedication & discipline for the elixir of life This is a chess man's game, take it from the old spider - Yes, the soul tires, but the competition still burns in his eyes like coal fires Life isn't meant to be all jolly and grand I remember sitting by my trainer's deathbed, he was watching me dance I liked these the most. Everything was good, though. Different than what I'm used to from you. Or maybe I just haven't been reading many open mics lately and my memory's a bit fuzzy. The rhymes seemed to come more rapidly than I in your other pieces. Quick combos to the body instead of haymakers that throw my brain for a loop. The content was on point, nailed the topic you were aiming for. Touched on some larger ideas while using your topic as the symbol. Cool piece. Nice to see you writing about "smaller" stuff, if that makes sense. __________________ Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder

07-04-2014, 04:10 PM	#3
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	Thanks padre.

07-07-2014, 11:57 AM	#4
Kin Kill.It.Nonstop Join Date: Jun 2014 Posts: 666 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 662201	Daaaaamn....the smoothness of thiz was whoa!!!.. may be the best flowin piece ive read on this site so far Talented writer right here...respect is due Dope story also...gonna be on the look out for more from u HoLLa

07-08-2014, 01:08 AM	#5
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	i enjoyed this quite a bit. definitely more economic from you with a centralized concept. i probably haven't seen you write like this before? it's in a more 'common' vein but still holds your own personality. b-hop doesn't really stop guys anymore; it's his wily craft as a veteran that sees him succeed. the hoplite line was clever. it's also the name of a game i really like by magma fortress. anyway this was a nice ode (if you could call it that). wordddddddddd.