Your execution?
 

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As the years tally, I'm feeling younger which I'm beginning to like
Never mistake hard work, dedication & discipline for the elixir of life
This is a chess man's game, take it from the old spider -
Yes, the soul tires, but the competition still burns in his eyes like coal fires

Life isn't meant to be all jolly and grand
I remember sitting by my trainer's deathbed, he was watching me dance

I liked these the most.

Everything was good, though. Different than what I'm used to from you. Or maybe I just haven't been reading many open mics lately and my memory's a bit fuzzy. The rhymes seemed to come more rapidly than I in your other pieces. Quick combos to the body instead of haymakers that throw my brain for a loop. The content was on point, nailed the topic you were aiming for. Touched on some larger ideas while using your topic as the symbol.

Cool piece. Nice to see you writing about "smaller" stuff, if that makes sense.

Thanks padre.

Daaaaamn....the smoothness of thiz was whoa!!!.. may be the best flowin piece ive read on this site so far

Talented writer right here...respect is due

Dope story also...gonna be on the look out for more from u

HoLLa

i enjoyed this quite a bit. definitely more economic from you with a centralized concept. i probably haven't seen you write like this before? it's in a more 'common' vein but still holds your own personality. b-hop doesn't really stop guys anymore; it's his wily craft as a veteran that sees him succeed. the hoplite line was clever. it's also the name of a game i really like by magma fortress.

anyway this was a nice ode (if you could call it that). wordddddddddd.