Defiant vs. Lotto Smirk {Defiant wins}

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@Lotto Smirk @Defiant

[Lotto Smirk]

lmao everytime i set a battle up in the battle areana i end up facing them in the league wanna just hit the league up instead defiant?

[Lotto Smirk]

might need an ext

[Defiant]

Yeh same il post early tomorrow

[Lotto Smirk]

This guy aint defiant, its just what he'll display
the only challenging thing hes ever done involved telling his dad he was gay
His girls a cheat, She been taking turns on forum members all night long
So when i say def is fucking his girl...She ain't the only one getting con'd
Were you from, Brooklyn? Nah look kid ya British no-one gets ya hype
But you'd pass as an american the way you fit the fat stereotype
And because your fat, you have no friends ya never gonna get a girl
because we all known Diso's an outcast of the social network world
This guy he lives for free, yet argues with his mum about whats for tea
I guess he really is defiant after...ah well... he can argue about the votes for me

rushed man

[Defiant]

at me on aim like i need some advice to be a threat too
my advice is take anything you can get, which is ya girls motto when she met you
the idea you'll amount to anything, we'l report n lynch
lotto hit the big screen on 8 mile, your hitting the big screen w/ your head on a 40 inch
if you try and pick up a chick, they always hit another ride
any girl with a smirk on her face, ironically goes 2 depressed state n commits suicide
the sites changed, been wondering if we'll scrape through
bringin it back to the old days, but without anxiety from when ya dad used to rape you
been losing for fun, so on this battle you should be off this
the way jim beat you from his desk, you'd think you was dwight from the office

[Flow]

Originally Posted by Lotto Smirk

This guy aint defiant, its just what he'll display
the only challenging thing hes ever done involved telling his dad he was gay
Meh Gay jokes have to be fire to pull off, this was just aight
His girls a cheat, She been taking turns on forum members all night long
So when i say def is fucking his girl...She ain't the only one getting con'd
meh it was aight
Were you from, Brooklyn? Nah look kid ya British no-one gets ya hype
But you'd pass as an american the way you fit the fat stereotype
Not sure how we know Def is fat...but if he was this would be nice
And because your fat, you have no friends ya never gonna get a girl
because we all known Diso's an outcast of the social network world
I didnt think this worked but I think there was a potential concept here
This guy he lives for free, yet argues with his mum about whats for tea
I guess he really is defiant after...ah well... he can argue about the votes for me
Didnt like this


rushed man

You could tell it was rushed, you shouldnt rush, last time I saw you rush was with Jimbo and Jimbo destroyed you for that reason... There was concepts in there but try and stay away from gay jokes which are gay in themself, and his mrs jokes which tend to be overplayed unless done with some flare.

Originally Posted by Defiant

at me on aim like i need some advice to be a threat too
my advice is take anything you can get, which is ya girls motto when she met you
Like i said I aint a fan of his mrs jokes, but when done well they pull off,this was one of the better ones,
the idea you'll amount to anything, we'l report n lynch
lotto hit the big screen on 8 mile, your hitting the big screen w/ your head on a 40 inch
ok
if you try and pick up a chick, they always hit another ride
any girl with a smirk on her face, ironically goes 2 depressed state n commits suicide
hmmm could of been worded better
the sites changed, been wondering if we'll scrape through
bringin it back to the old days, but without anxiety from when ya dad used to rape you
lol i like this but thats my humor, i could see other cats not feeling it
been losing for fun, so on this battle you should be off this
the way jim beat you from his desk, you'd think you was dwight from the officelol

Vote Def on a more solid verse

[Untold]

This guy aint defiant, its just what he'll display
the only challenging thing hes ever done involved telling his dad he was gay

Vs.

at me on aim like i need some advice to be a threat too
my advice is take anything you can get, which is ya girls motto when she met you
the idea you'll amount to anything, we'l report n lynch
lotto hit the big screen on 8 mile, your hitting the big screen w/ your head on a 40 inch
the sites changed, been wondering if we'll scrape through
bringin it back to the old days, but without anxiety from when ya dad used to rape you
been losing for fun, so on this battle you should be off this
the way jim beat you from his desk, you'd think you was dwight from the office

Overall, pretty one sided battle. Lotto I hope this was rushed and doesn't resemble your style of battling at all. I feel like there were a bunch of lame set ups with no real punch lines. Your opener was pretty weak to but it was the only clever(kind of) punch you had. Maybe I'm missing something. On the other hand, Defiant did pretty well. Pretty consistent verse. I liked a majority of the punches. I got the depressed state line just wasn't feelin it tho. Anywho, my vote is: Defiant

[Sharp]

Nothing

V

Opener, smirk on her face slayed me


Lotto can do better, defiant was strong all around, pretty obvious decision

V/ defiant

[Dominate]

Lotto- you've been getting better but I can tell you didn't put much effort into this verse... Opener was kind of OK

Vs

girls motto, 8 mile, smirk on her face all pretty good ... Good showing


V/ defiant

[Cashius]

Lotto- Nothing really stood out. It was obviously rushed.

Vs.

Smirk on face...8 mile was ok.

Defiant took this pretty easily.

Defiant.

[megatron]

Lotto- Only the opener kinda, the rest ...nothing to be honest

Def-smirk on her face, girls motto

def showed, had some ok lines but it was enough to take the win, lotto didn't come to fight in this one
v/def

[Undead.]

Lotto lacked the wording to execute his concepts to hit. His opener was a decent start, after that he fell off completely. I see potential, keep it up bro.

"at me on aim like i need some advice to be a threat too
my advice is take anything you can get, which is ya girls motto when she met you"

lol

Def..Had a much more polished verse, definitely has crisper wording to execute his shots better. I think, he was off this week a bit. I have read sharper material from this bloke. Like the smirk on her face line. A couple others were jabs imo, not really hard shots.

Well, all in all i feel def stole the show.

[Utmost]

Def

motto, smirk

good execution and setups, lended well to bringin that snap harshness to what some would call simpler concepts

Lotto

it was obv rushed, you had some good ideas down just absent some of the polish we're used to seeing from you.

v/Def

[Def_fuckin_5]

Lotto:

nothing


Defiant:

Motto


lotto had a decent verse..no standout lines though


vote=Defiant