Legion

Zen · 11-17-2013, 07:12 PM

You wish, you were as dope as me. A coma dream alone. A beast at home. At ease. Watch closely and learn what hopeless means. A moment of peace bashing through Roman streets on this path, soldiers creep screaming "Attack!!" like Polish freaks. No, wait, sit back, just grab you some oval-tine, and when you get back, I'll nap on your sofa, please?

Time passed clasping zig zags and a bag full of weed. God damn, shit, who's that? Oh, it's me. Grab my phone, and keys, deadbolt. Just a flash of genius, a metaphor for this savage creature. I left the store empowered. No pastor, no preacher. Just a known bastard who just so happened to reason in a cavern with leaders deep in my labyrinth, my theater. Masked my features with a passion of actors in grieving. All in black. A believer. Get back bitch, we ain't leaving. Strap in quick before I blast it this evening. A catholic heathen at mass just dreaming of massacres and demons. Shit, I'm just happy and breathing smoke. Little fatter from eating souls.

You faggots don't even know.

I'm a disaster; A FEMA drone. Harmless and predisposed to gargle adrenochrome with caramel tea and coke. The Marxist with an evil flow carving artists in their apartments like Dahmer while donning Jesus' robes. The martyr born from karma is leaving home now that the weed is smoked to swarm upon ya with swords of honor; the legion's code.

Mike Wrecka · 11-18-2013, 05:57 PM

this was pretty fucking sick zen. I know you have been experimenting with this style quite a bit lately and I have to say , this was it at its pinnacle. it flowed sick and would sound real nasty on a beat.

it was very reminiscent of a dull boy verse. but this actually outshines some of his as of late drops imo. it had a nastier flow. im looking forward to you dropping a not paragraph verse in the AOWL this week though. I think this style is perfect for audio but doesn't work as well in text. but ya your flow has stepped up quite a bit here.

Frank · 11-18-2013, 06:28 PM

I shouldn't have voted against your best verse against King Ra

It was a great read.

Zen · 11-18-2013, 06:46 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Frank

I shouldn't have voted against your best verse against King Ra

It was a great read.

No, you shouldn't have, but I forgive you Frank.

dead man · 11-18-2013, 06:51 PM

damn. buddha zen snapping with the schemery.

very nice work. the last paragraph was most impressive given what i think was your intent with this verse. sickness..

Frank · 11-18-2013, 07:32 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Buddha

No, you shouldn't have, but I forgive you Frank.

My vote had the reverse effect.

Focus once again. And I shall commend you.

veritas · 11-18-2013, 08:04 PM

this was dope. that fema drone scheme was dope as heck man!

Mr. J · 11-19-2013, 01:11 PM

This was a great piece the flow was crazy and the multis off the chain
it had some great transitioning as well it seemed seamless
you have been dropping more potent lately it seems
great read I enjoyed the switch ups the second section was my favr
nice work bruh keep writing!

Zen · 11-21-2013, 01:31 PM

Up. I will return feed even though I've been slacking lately.

Objective · 11-23-2013, 01:50 AM

Definitely thought this was a dope read. Not really a fan of the paragraph-style everyone is doing lately, but I got to admit that this shit was top notch ish. Eating souls & actors grieving being fav lines and the last paragraph was dope af. Keep it up!

e11even · 11-25-2013, 05:10 AM

Props dude. I pay no attention to accounts, so this feed is me realizing you are Zen. I'm stoopid. Anyways, great great great work. I can't match that level wordsmithing. That shit blew my head off my shoulders. Hats off (lol) to you, Sir.

11-17-2013, 07:12 PM	#1
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Legion You wish, you were as dope as me. A coma dream alone. A beast at home. At ease. Watch closely and learn what hopeless means. A moment of peace bashing through Roman streets on this path, soldiers creep screaming "Attack!!" like Polish freaks. No, wait, sit back, just grab you some oval-tine, and when you get back, I'll nap on your sofa, please? Time passed clasping zig zags and a bag full of weed. God damn, shit, who's that? Oh, it's me. Grab my phone, and keys, deadbolt. Just a flash of genius, a metaphor for this savage creature. I left the store empowered. No pastor, no preacher. Just a known bastard who just so happened to reason in a cavern with leaders deep in my labyrinth, my theater. Masked my features with a passion of actors in grieving. All in black. A believer. Get back bitch, we ain't leaving. Strap in quick before I blast it this evening. A catholic heathen at mass just dreaming of massacres and demons. Shit, I'm just happy and breathing smoke. Little fatter from eating souls. You faggots don't even know. I'm a disaster; A FEMA drone. Harmless and predisposed to gargle adrenochrome with caramel tea and coke. The Marxist with an evil flow carving artists in their apartments like Dahmer while donning Jesus' robes. The martyr born from karma is leaving home now that the weed is smoked to swarm upon ya with swords of honor; the legion's code.

11-18-2013, 05:57 PM	#2
Mike Wrecka WOW Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,591 Battle Record: 29-25 Champed - Writing Challenge League I Rep Power: 82779338	this was pretty fucking sick zen. I know you have been experimenting with this style quite a bit lately and I have to say , this was it at its pinnacle. it flowed sick and would sound real nasty on a beat. it was very reminiscent of a dull boy verse. but this actually outshines some of his as of late drops imo. it had a nastier flow. im looking forward to you dropping a not paragraph verse in the AOWL this week though. I think this style is perfect for audio but doesn't work as well in text. but ya your flow has stepped up quite a bit here. __________________ A.bove T.he R.est

11-18-2013, 06:28 PM	#3
Frank Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 3,228 Champed - NWL Season 2 - Art of Writing League (5x) - Lime Green Poetry Association - AOWL Season 6 - AOWL Season 10 Rep Power: 3853347	I shouldn't have voted against your best verse against King Ra It was a great read. __________________ *VETWORK*

11-18-2013, 06:51 PM	#5
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,485 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606679	damn. buddha zen snapping with the schemery. very nice work. the last paragraph was most impressive given what i think was your intent with this verse. sickness.. __________________ Zack Wicks for president

11-19-2013, 01:11 PM	#8
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	This was a great piece the flow was crazy and the multis off the chain it had some great transitioning as well it seemed seamless you have been dropping more potent lately it seems great read I enjoyed the switch ups the second section was my favr nice work bruh keep writing! __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

11-21-2013, 01:31 PM	#9
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Up. I will return feed even though I've been slacking lately.

11-23-2013, 01:50 AM	#10
Objective ( ͡º ͜ʖ ͡º) Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,868 Battle Record: 17-32 Rep Power: 52474192	Definitely thought this was a dope read. Not really a fan of the paragraph-style everyone is doing lately, but I got to admit that this shit was top notch ish. Eating souls & actors grieving being fav lines and the last paragraph was dope af. Keep it up! __________________ I'm not a slave for entertainment, I'm entertainments personal slave, So deep into writing I'm concerned bout the text on my grave. www.youtube.com/watch?v=gV8ozGcGJ6o

11-25-2013, 05:10 AM	#11
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	Props dude. I pay no attention to accounts, so this feed is me realizing you are Zen. I'm stoopid. Anyways, great great great work. I can't match that level wordsmithing. That shit blew my head off my shoulders. Hats off (lol) to you, Sir. __________________ Ahem.