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Zen 11-17-2013 07:12 PM

Legion
 
You wish, you were as dope as me. A coma dream alone. A beast at home. At ease. Watch closely and learn what hopeless means. A moment of peace bashing through Roman streets on this path, soldiers creep screaming "Attack!!" like Polish freaks. No, wait, sit back, just grab you some oval-tine, and when you get back, I'll nap on your sofa, please?

Time passed clasping zig zags and a bag full of weed. God damn, shit, who's that? Oh, it's me. Grab my phone, and keys, deadbolt. Just a flash of genius, a metaphor for this savage creature. I left the store empowered. No pastor, no preacher. Just a known bastard who just so happened to reason in a cavern with leaders deep in my labyrinth, my theater. Masked my features with a passion of actors in grieving. All in black. A believer. Get back bitch, we ain't leaving. Strap in quick before I blast it this evening. A catholic heathen at mass just dreaming of massacres and demons. Shit, I'm just happy and breathing smoke. Little fatter from eating souls.

You faggots don't even know.

I'm a disaster; A FEMA drone. Harmless and predisposed to gargle adrenochrome with caramel tea and coke. The Marxist with an evil flow carving artists in their apartments like Dahmer while donning Jesus' robes. The martyr born from karma is leaving home now that the weed is smoked to swarm upon ya with swords of honor; the legion's code.

Mike Wrecka 11-18-2013 05:57 PM

this was pretty fucking sick zen. I know you have been experimenting with this style quite a bit lately and I have to say , this was it at its pinnacle. it flowed sick and would sound real nasty on a beat.

it was very reminiscent of a dull boy verse. but this actually outshines some of his as of late drops imo. it had a nastier flow. im looking forward to you dropping a not paragraph verse in the AOWL this week though. I think this style is perfect for audio but doesn't work as well in text. but ya your flow has stepped up quite a bit here.

Frank 11-18-2013 06:28 PM

I shouldn't have voted against your best verse against King Ra

It was a great read.

Zen 11-18-2013 06:46 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Frank (Post 210998)
I shouldn't have voted against your best verse against King Ra

It was a great read.

No, you shouldn't have, but I forgive you Frank.

dead man 11-18-2013 06:51 PM

damn. buddha zen snapping with the schemery.

very nice work. the last paragraph was most impressive given what i think was your intent with this verse. sickness..

Frank 11-18-2013 07:32 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Buddha (Post 211001)
No, you shouldn't have, but I forgive you Frank.

My vote had the reverse effect.

Focus once again. And I shall commend you.

veritas 11-18-2013 08:04 PM

this was dope. that fema drone scheme was dope as heck man!

Mr. J 11-19-2013 01:11 PM

This was a great piece the flow was crazy and the multis off the chain
it had some great transitioning as well it seemed seamless
you have been dropping more potent lately it seems
great read I enjoyed the switch ups the second section was my favr
nice work bruh keep writing!

Zen 11-21-2013 01:31 PM

Up. I will return feed even though I've been slacking lately.

Objective 11-23-2013 01:50 AM

Definitely thought this was a dope read. Not really a fan of the paragraph-style everyone is doing lately, but I got to admit that this shit was top notch ish. Eating souls & actors grieving being fav lines and the last paragraph was dope af. Keep it up!

e11even 11-25-2013 05:10 AM

Props dude. I pay no attention to accounts, so this feed is me realizing you are Zen. I'm stoopid. Anyways, great great great work. I can't match that level wordsmithing. That shit blew my head off my shoulders. Hats off (lol) to you, Sir.


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