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Old 10-27-2013, 12:26 PM   #1
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Love's blind -so is ass, his lust finds no relax
Reddish blonde hair bitch, a bloodshot golden lab
Cuffed -propped, she folds in half, he buldges -blood is flowing fast
Knowing that, her cage's locked with a key no one has
Sultry, trashed, they both have had to much to drink, its comforting
Asks him what's been on his mind, but gives a fuck of what he thinks
A lovely pink between her legs, the sweetest flesh
A set of lips that doesn't speak, they just suggest a plead for sex
An equal test, the liquers poured, forbidden porn
Diseases of a hidden sort, to walk away -or kiss a whore
Flirting with a vicious force, permission born
Twisted -torn, fifty -fifty, he submits or its abort
Noticing a distance forms she moans a little filthier
He filters words, with a clear sense of thought -notices the filth is her
Builds his nerve to walk away, otherwise the dog would stay
The traps been set, balls been played, but this bitch is off the chain
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Old 10-27-2013, 05:39 PM   #2
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Nice little short piece here. After reading this from you I couldn't help but think that your style is like a crazy version of how Jay Z raps with the pauses and what not. Jigga fan? Idk. I might just be stoned lol. What I mean by that is that your flow is always excellent but your words are much more complex and tougher to pull off imo. All in all, this was a good drop.
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Old 10-28-2013, 01:28 AM   #3
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Dope drop as usual.

''Noticing a distance forms she moans a little filthier
He filters words, with a clear sense of thought -notices the filth is her
Builds his nerve to walk away, otherwise the dog would stay
The traps been set, balls been played, but this bitch is off the chain.''
^Enjoyed this shit the most.

Very well written, keep it up.
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