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Geno 10-27-2013 12:26 PM

Her.
 
Love's blind -so is ass, his lust finds no relax
Reddish blonde hair bitch, a bloodshot golden lab
Cuffed -propped, she folds in half, he buldges -blood is flowing fast
Knowing that, her cage's locked with a key no one has
Sultry, trashed, they both have had to much to drink, its comforting
Asks him what's been on his mind, but gives a fuck of what he thinks
A lovely pink between her legs, the sweetest flesh
A set of lips that doesn't speak, they just suggest a plead for sex
An equal test, the liquers poured, forbidden porn
Diseases of a hidden sort, to walk away -or kiss a whore
Flirting with a vicious force, permission born
Twisted -torn, fifty -fifty, he submits or its abort
Noticing a distance forms she moans a little filthier
He filters words, with a clear sense of thought -notices the filth is her
Builds his nerve to walk away, otherwise the dog would stay
The traps been set, balls been played, but this bitch is off the chain

Zen 10-27-2013 05:39 PM

Nice little short piece here. After reading this from you I couldn't help but think that your style is like a crazy version of how Jay Z raps with the pauses and what not. Jigga fan? Idk. I might just be stoned lol. What I mean by that is that your flow is always excellent but your words are much more complex and tougher to pull off imo. All in all, this was a good drop.

Objective 10-28-2013 01:28 AM

Dope drop as usual.

''Noticing a distance forms she moans a little filthier
He filters words, with a clear sense of thought -notices the filth is her
Builds his nerve to walk away, otherwise the dog would stay
The traps been set, balls been played, but this bitch is off the chain.''
^Enjoyed this shit the most.

Very well written, keep it up.


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