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Old 09-28-2013, 05:09 AM   #1
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Old 09-28-2013, 05:54 AM   #2
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Old 09-28-2013, 01:24 PM   #3
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Good turn of phrase, I enjoy your interesting style and often unique word choice. The kind of condescending/aggressive tone was really great too, it gave the writing a nice position.
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