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Old 06-15-2015, 11:14 AM   #1
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Default DON'T STARE AT THE MOON

We all want illusions of control. The feeling of truth in what we know,
but betrayal turns to fail-ure and a ruining of hope
when what you believe is so becomes a lucid dream. You woke
to you asleep. Now no human being can prove they mean what's spoken.
Her promises aren't honest. They may mean well, but she sells
preposterous misconduct to everything that we've felt.
Forever. Undying. Eternal. I'LL NEVER LEAVE YOU.
Save it. This moment's all we'll know and lies needn't be true.
My eyes read as see-through, yet I keep a piece to
cope and deny. There's no going through life this re-al.
So coil around my finger. Succumb to realities I weave
in your galaxy of think. I wear this royal crown, as leader.
Dating pool shark. Smart with a razor toothed heart.
Sometimes I play the fool. 'cause being this way is too hard.
Tried to taste the ruse. Wanted to erase my views.
Everyday, abused my brain with booze I drank. I'd brood
trying to persuade the truth to vacate. I used
people as shields. Built a life over graves.
But the truth haunted me, and she could see the lie. Open faced.
I'm a peculiar brand of what you might call a monster.
I've witnessed senses. I've viewed the cause of conscience.
It's the idea of ourselves being an ideal of a shell.
I feel I'm in hell. I deal with myself as well as I feel I can help.
I'm mourning a loss of innocence most don't know existed.
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Old 06-16-2015, 12:51 PM   #2
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bb intrigued. tired of imaginary sparring with deadman and cake. dey 2 ez. BB SALIVATING RITE NOW
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If mentioned in a discussion its who'd still use wordy lines and act all dope
Then again hes had this schtick so long he like bb da bb da bb thats all folks
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Old 06-18-2015, 12:44 AM   #3
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Related to the 'fool' part, can't impress everyone when you think outside the box.
after the first four lines I felt you really picked up steam
this is different from the other piece you dropped which I put mytwist on 'cause it seemed fun
I think what really stuck out for me was how you wrote it out
It reads different from other pieces and has a certain idk mystique to it
Either way nice work here breh
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