scream into the void

dead man · 04-24-2021, 04:06 AM

nature calls
we acquiesce
naked on a plastic bench
laying in magnolias we asked each other what we meant
simple never complicated
sitting in your mother's basement
hope i die before you but i never say it just in case
human race / mutilation for community's sake
crushing gravel in our fingertips to bloody our faces
soaking slugs in vinegar assemble your rifle
war pigs kill or die and spend our time remembering why
under his eye. our conspiracies materialized
now we scream into the void until we hear a reply
broadbandit, thief in the night
grab whatever's convenient
i'll grant whatever you desire of me except an agreement
button me down
build me castles til there's nothing around
our pyramids have leasing agents hunting them down
lose me in a desert when the vultures are out
trek towards any shadow that resembles a house
cakti island spike me with the poison i need
all this city ever gave me was a lawyer for free
torch and needle toilet seats our porcelain retreats
left us scratching panelboard and chewing our cheeks
burning for weeks, barefoot in convertible jeeps
searching through our dreamstate for a permanent sleep
narcoleptic drawn lethargic lost in a haze
my memories of late feel like a dramatization
i fuck up
you forgive me, cause its late
we're all exhausted, its okay
wake up and give the world another clockwise rotation

thanks

veritas · 04-24-2021, 10:24 AM

You just poetically described how i didn’t even lnow I felt about listening to couples tell me about their dysfunctional communication protocols. Wow. Thanks friend.

Universe · 04-25-2021, 03:07 PM

Beauty. I honestly wish I could write like you... so effortless and just plain brilliant at points.

"simple never complicated
sitting in your mother's basement
hope i die before you but i never say it just in case"

- You pack so much into such tiny lines, impressive to read.

"button me down
build me castles til there's nothing around
our pyramids have leasing agents hunting them down
lose me in a desert when the vultures are out
trek towards any shadow that resembles a house"

- I'm confused by this but love it all the same lol, think every line here was meant to be contradictory? Great imagery.

"burning for weeks, barefoot in convertible jeeps
searching through our dreamstate for a permanent sleep"

- Vintage dead man.

Always excited to click on your posts. You never fail to deliver.

Geno · 04-30-2021, 05:19 AM

Entirely qoutable. It would be dissrespectful to pick one or two lines or a few... Dope

Mael · 05-19-2021, 01:40 AM

war pigs kill or die and spend our time remembering why
under his eye. our conspiracies materialized
now we scream into the void until we hear a reply
broadbandit, thief in the night

Sick wordplay. Whole piece was fire. Some bars hit close to home.

Pharaohs Army · 09-19-2021, 07:27 AM

all this city ever gave me was a lawyer for free

Really like that line for some reason

04-24-2021, 04:06 AM	#1
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,485 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606679	scream into the void nature calls we acquiesce naked on a plastic bench laying in magnolias we asked each other what we meant simple never complicated sitting in your mother's basement hope i die before you but i never say it just in case human race / mutilation for community's sake crushing gravel in our fingertips to bloody our faces soaking slugs in vinegar assemble your rifle war pigs kill or die and spend our time remembering why under his eye. our conspiracies materialized now we scream into the void until we hear a reply broadbandit, thief in the night grab whatever's convenient i'll grant whatever you desire of me except an agreement button me down build me castles til there's nothing around our pyramids have leasing agents hunting them down lose me in a desert when the vultures are out trek towards any shadow that resembles a house cakti island spike me with the poison i need all this city ever gave me was a lawyer for free torch and needle toilet seats our porcelain retreats left us scratching panelboard and chewing our cheeks burning for weeks, barefoot in convertible jeeps searching through our dreamstate for a permanent sleep narcoleptic drawn lethargic lost in a haze my memories of late feel like a dramatization i fuck up you forgive me, cause its late we're all exhausted, its okay wake up and give the world another clockwise rotation thanks __________________ Zack Wicks for president

04-25-2021, 03:07 PM	#3
Universe Everything's Connected Join Date: Nov 2017 Location: Niagara Falls, Canada Posts: 1,001 Battle Record: 19-8 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League(2x) - GWL Picture challenge(2x) - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 10178706	Beauty. I honestly wish I could write like you... so effortless and just plain brilliant at points. "simple never complicated sitting in your mother's basement hope i die before you but i never say it just in case" - You pack so much into such tiny lines, impressive to read. "button me down build me castles til there's nothing around our pyramids have leasing agents hunting them down lose me in a desert when the vultures are out trek towards any shadow that resembles a house" - I'm confused by this but love it all the same lol, think every line here was meant to be contradictory? Great imagery. "burning for weeks, barefoot in convertible jeeps searching through our dreamstate for a permanent sleep" - Vintage dead man. Always excited to click on your posts. You never fail to deliver. __________________ ..Passed the Present and Future..

04-30-2021, 05:19 AM	#4
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	Entirely qoutable. It would be dissrespectful to pick one or two lines or a few... Dope __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

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05-19-2021, 01:40 AM	#5
Mael Almighty Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 580 Battle Record: 2-3 Rep Power: 428844	war pigs kill or die and spend our time remembering why under his eye. our conspiracies materialized now we scream into the void until we hear a reply broadbandit, thief in the night Sick wordplay. Whole piece was fire. Some bars hit close to home.

09-19-2021, 07:27 AM	#6
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	all this city ever gave me was a lawyer for free Really like that line for some reason