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dead man 04-24-2021 04:06 AM

scream into the void
 
nature calls
we acquiesce
naked on a plastic bench
laying in magnolias we asked each other what we meant
simple never complicated
sitting in your mother's basement
hope i die before you but i never say it just in case
human race / mutilation for community's sake
crushing gravel in our fingertips to bloody our faces
soaking slugs in vinegar assemble your rifle
war pigs kill or die and spend our time remembering why
under his eye. our conspiracies materialized
now we scream into the void until we hear a reply
broadbandit, thief in the night
grab whatever's convenient
i'll grant whatever you desire of me except an agreement
button me down
build me castles til there's nothing around
our pyramids have leasing agents hunting them down
lose me in a desert when the vultures are out
trek towards any shadow that resembles a house
cakti island spike me with the poison i need
all this city ever gave me was a lawyer for free
torch and needle toilet seats our porcelain retreats
left us scratching panelboard and chewing our cheeks
burning for weeks, barefoot in convertible jeeps
searching through our dreamstate for a permanent sleep
narcoleptic drawn lethargic lost in a haze
my memories of late feel like a dramatization
i fuck up
you forgive me, cause its late
we're all exhausted, its okay
wake up and give the world another clockwise rotation




thanks

veritas 04-24-2021 10:24 AM

You just poetically described how i didn’t even lnow I felt about listening to couples tell me about their dysfunctional communication protocols. Wow. Thanks friend.

Universe 04-25-2021 03:07 PM

Beauty. I honestly wish I could write like you... so effortless and just plain brilliant at points.

"simple never complicated
sitting in your mother's basement
hope i die before you but i never say it just in case
"

- You pack so much into such tiny lines, impressive to read.

"button me down
build me castles til there's nothing around
our pyramids have leasing agents hunting them down
lose me in a desert when the vultures are out
trek towards any shadow that resembles a house
"

- I'm confused by this but love it all the same lol, think every line here was meant to be contradictory? Great imagery.

"burning for weeks, barefoot in convertible jeeps
searching through our dreamstate for a permanent sleep
"

- Vintage dead man.

Always excited to click on your posts. You never fail to deliver.

Geno 04-30-2021 05:19 AM

Entirely qoutable. It would be dissrespectful to pick one or two lines or a few... Dope

Mael 05-19-2021 01:40 AM

war pigs kill or die and spend our time remembering why
under his eye. our conspiracies materialized
now we scream into the void until we hear a reply
broadbandit, thief in the night

Sick wordplay. Whole piece was fire. Some bars hit close to home.

Pharaohs Army 09-19-2021 07:27 AM

all this city ever gave me was a lawyer for free

Really like that line for some reason


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