Mother

Dope girl · 02-22-2020, 09:36 AM

She been there through my first and talk
she took me to the park
so we can spend the day together
She kept me out of the dark
Everyone is a shark
Life is rough
She taught me how to stay strong
When things get tough
I've got her pride
No matter what
She's by my side

Witty · 02-22-2020, 01:32 PM

I'm not going to lie, I have read a lot of your stuff and I thought I knew what to expect, but the 'everyone is a shark' line took me by complete surprise. I was in no way expecting that.

slecht · 02-22-2020, 08:19 PM

I like it

Dope girl · 02-22-2020, 08:22 PM

Thanks guys

Exis · 02-23-2020, 12:50 AM

You've upped your steez...Good stuff Robranda.

Dope girl · 02-23-2020, 08:39 AM

Thanks

Adverse · 02-23-2020, 02:02 PM

A lot more insightful than previous things i read from you, maybe write more personally going forward? Also try to write a whole verse next time and not a quarter of one, keep writing

Dope girl · 02-23-2020, 10:43 PM

Thanks for the feedback

02-22-2020, 09:36 AM	#1
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,707 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521416	Mother She been there through my first and talk she took me to the park so we can spend the day together She kept me out of the dark Everyone is a shark Life is rough She taught me how to stay strong When things get tough I've got her pride No matter what She's by my side Last edited by Dope girl; 02-22-2020 at 09:40 AM.

02-22-2020, 01:32 PM	#2
Witty Lime Life Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 16,813 Battle Record: 30-41 Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded Champed - Lyric Olympics - Summer Classic Rep Power: 82986458	I'm not going to lie, I have read a lot of your stuff and I thought I knew what to expect, but the 'everyone is a shark' line took me by complete surprise. I was in no way expecting that. __________________ He listens to voices inside of his mind Explicit and poisonous violent crime.

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02-22-2020, 08:19 PM	#3
slecht Twitter: @ricanjq Join Date: May 2016 Posts: 582 Battle Record: 4-12 Champed - 1-2 Punch league Rep Power: 2236280	I like it

02-22-2020, 08:22 PM	#4
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,707 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521416	Thanks guys

02-23-2020, 12:50 AM	#5
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	You've upped your steez...Good stuff Robranda.

02-23-2020, 08:39 AM	#6
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,707 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521416	Thanks

02-23-2020, 02:02 PM	#7
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,747 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446143	A lot more insightful than previous things i read from you, maybe write more personally going forward? Also try to write a whole verse next time and not a quarter of one, keep writing

02-23-2020, 10:43 PM	#8
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,707 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521416	Thanks for the feedback