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Dope girl 02-22-2020 09:36 AM

Mother
 
She been there through my first and talk
she took me to the park
so we can spend the day together
She kept me out of the dark
Everyone is a shark
Life is rough
She taught me how to stay strong
When things get tough
I've got her pride
No matter what
She's by my side

Witty 02-22-2020 01:32 PM

I'm not going to lie, I have read a lot of your stuff and I thought I knew what to expect, but the 'everyone is a shark' line took me by complete surprise. I was in no way expecting that.

slecht 02-22-2020 08:19 PM

I like it

Dope girl 02-22-2020 08:22 PM

Thanks guys

Exis 02-23-2020 12:50 AM

You've upped your steez...Good stuff Robranda.

Dope girl 02-23-2020 08:39 AM

Thanks

Adverse 02-23-2020 02:02 PM

A lot more insightful than previous things i read from you, maybe write more personally going forward? Also try to write a whole verse next time and not a quarter of one, keep writing

Dope girl 02-23-2020 10:43 PM

Thanks for the feedback


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