Psychoanalyze Me Like One of Your French Girls

oats · 08-13-2013, 08:12 PM

Let em go, roll the dice, the pedestal of open mics
Beretta flow, the poltergeist, you better know that oats is nice
Incredible, prose is like the coldest night at Leningrad
My keyboard is a ouija while explosions light my pen n pad

Corrosive type, upending tracks, pencil painting leaded pictures
Ventilating Venn descriptors, menstruating metascriptures
Bend and break the lesser listeners, a Wookie embedded Michener
Old school, so cool, calling kids pussies instead of hipsters

Crooked, the letter whisperer, incisions for calibration
Sharp boned, my smart phone's a sickle cell to answer Satan
Rivindell on acid patience, a twisted tale of masked elation
Mr. Always-Masturbate's Caligula coagulating

Mystical, emasculating, quick to pull a massive Matrix
Listen well - imagine sacred, kiss and tell cuz magic's nascent
Grip the L, that's how we make the strong silent, bomb tyrants
When life gives you lemons - you're one step closer to a Long Island

Nigma · 08-13-2013, 08:22 PM

Lots of quotes, beautiful flow, buttery read. Loved the schemes in the first stanza, references in the 3rd stanza. Nascent is a dope word that I've never heard before, ty for inspiring me to look it up. More content in this small verse then most have in double the content. No filler, really good verse oats. I nod respectfully in your general direction.

Wise Wiggles · 08-13-2013, 08:36 PM

reminds me of sumting

CymbiCort · 08-13-2013, 08:56 PM

Dayum.

NYCSPITZ · 08-13-2013, 09:08 PM

dope isn't caligula some roman dude

Pent uP · 08-13-2013, 10:48 PM

Lol at your ender

I just saw a sign a pub that said 'when life gives u lemons ...add beer and make a shandy'

But yeah lots of quotables..second stanza was bonkers multis. Cool flex.

dull boy · 08-13-2013, 10:55 PM

Dope.

Geno · 08-14-2013, 01:01 AM

Love long islands.

Dagel is a biter · 08-14-2013, 03:50 AM

Pretty dope for a free flow rant. Really not a huge fan of this style but you never disappoint with your technical content my friend. Keep it hundred my nigga.

Certain · 08-14-2013, 06:26 AM

There's really not a whole lot to say. This was sick all the way through. I loved "Wookie-embedded Michener." Unlike a lot of these pieces, the abstractions really made sense and connected seamlessly, and I think a lot of that has to do with flipping between really dense verbiage and simple lines like the one about "calling kids pussies." The first stanza had the best flow, but the third was just fire on every line.

As far as flexes go, this was terrific.

CopyPat · 08-16-2013, 01:46 AM

word. skimmed this on my phone when u first dropped it. i loved this kinda stuff man. rhyme that whole line shit. ahhaha awesome. i actually basically just did this same thing you should check it, u probly like it haha. Always been a fan oats, but this was really cool to see from u cause i don't think ive read one quite like this from u before, on that straight up rappin to rap about rappin shit and flowing to show how good u are at flowing lol. no this was wicked. nice short fun read. not too serious just flex. dope dude. good to see u color outside the lines a little and just have some fun with it

veritas · 08-16-2013, 10:15 AM

I don't always flow, but when I do, I like to flow like this.

BWHAHA · 08-16-2013, 01:10 PM

hey bud! this was kewl! stop trying to impress me. B-AHA-!

Vulgar · 08-16-2013, 02:56 PM

lol@ the tag, geezus

Corrosive type, upending tracks, pencil painting leaded pictures
Ventilating Venn descriptors, menstruating metascriptures
^Loved this part, br0.

oats · 08-16-2013, 03:50 PM

Appreciate the feed, for the verse and my teaching.

BWHAHA · 08-16-2013, 11:05 PM

oats can u put the quaker man avi back.. i dont think ur really oats

Mr. J · 08-17-2013, 01:27 AM

This shit was sick throughout the whole drop
The flow was amazing it came with a great combination of couplets
Smooth transition from line to line
Nice drop oats keep writing

oats · 08-17-2013, 02:09 AM

@BWHAHA I would but then I'm afraid I might be trying to impress you :-/

but it's me, good ol oatmeal

ill nik-A · 08-17-2013, 09:22 AM

Hipster shit was my fave line but 3rd stanza was my fave segment, nice flow, solid drop

Darth Yoda · 08-17-2013, 12:37 PM

lol @ this title

08-13-2013, 08:12 PM	#1
oats Steel Cut Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 5,084 Battle Record: 19-10 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Fight Night LXXXIV - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 79005428	Psychoanalyze Me Like One of Your French Girls Let em go, roll the dice, the pedestal of open mics Beretta flow, the poltergeist, you better know that oats is nice Incredible, prose is like the coldest night at Leningrad My keyboard is a ouija while explosions light my pen n pad Corrosive type, upending tracks, pencil painting leaded pictures Ventilating Venn descriptors, menstruating metascriptures Bend and break the lesser listeners, a Wookie embedded Michener Old school, so cool, calling kids pussies instead of hipsters Crooked, the letter whisperer, incisions for calibration Sharp boned, my smart phone's a sickle cell to answer Satan Rivindell on acid patience, a twisted tale of masked elation Mr. Always-Masturbate's Caligula coagulating Mystical, emasculating, quick to pull a massive Matrix Listen well - imagine sacred, kiss and tell cuz magic's nascent Grip the L, that's how we make the strong silent, bomb tyrants When life gives you lemons - you're one step closer to a Long Island

08-13-2013, 08:22 PM	#2
Nigma The COAT... Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: BC, Canada Posts: 1,723 Battle Record: 28-20 Champed - Art of Writing League (x3) Rep Power: 4595813	Lots of quotes, beautiful flow, buttery read. Loved the schemes in the first stanza, references in the 3rd stanza. Nascent is a dope word that I've never heard before, ty for inspiring me to look it up. More content in this small verse then most have in double the content. No filler, really good verse oats. I nod respectfully in your general direction. __________________

08-13-2013, 08:36 PM	#3
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,505 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788022	reminds me of sumting __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

08-14-2013, 01:01 AM	#8
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	Love long islands. __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

08-14-2013, 06:26 AM	#10
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	There's really not a whole lot to say. This was sick all the way through. I loved "Wookie-embedded Michener." Unlike a lot of these pieces, the abstractions really made sense and connected seamlessly, and I think a lot of that has to do with flipping between really dense verbiage and simple lines like the one about "calling kids pussies." The first stanza had the best flow, but the third was just fire on every line. As far as flexes go, this was terrific. __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.

08-13-2013, 08:56 PM	#4
CymbiCort Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 184 Battle Record: 4-13 Rep Power: 37	Dayum.

08-13-2013, 09:08 PM	#5
NYCSPITZ SYRACUSE Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,031 Battle Record: 31-37 Champed - Write Night II - Alias Topical Tournament Rep Power: 4743547	dope isn't caligula some roman dude

08-13-2013, 10:48 PM	#6
Pent uP Robin Williams of Fallen Victims Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 1,499 Battle Record: 25-11 Accomplishments - NC Hall of Fame Champed - Netcees Writers League (2x) - NWL Season 1 - Write Night I - Art of Writing League (2x) - Write Week IV Rep Power: 6862275	Lol at your ender I just saw a sign a pub that said 'when life gives u lemons ...add beer and make a shandy' But yeah lots of quotables..second stanza was bonkers multis. Cool flex.

08-13-2013, 10:55 PM	#7
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,054 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345604	Dope.

08-14-2013, 03:50 AM	#9
Dagel is a biter The Misfit Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 166 Battle Record: 0-1 Rep Power: 0	Pretty dope for a free flow rant. Really not a huge fan of this style but you never disappoint with your technical content my friend. Keep it hundred my nigga.

08-16-2013, 01:46 AM	#11
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	word. skimmed this on my phone when u first dropped it. i loved this kinda stuff man. rhyme that whole line shit. ahhaha awesome. i actually basically just did this same thing you should check it, u probly like it haha. Always been a fan oats, but this was really cool to see from u cause i don't think ive read one quite like this from u before, on that straight up rappin to rap about rappin shit and flowing to show how good u are at flowing lol. no this was wicked. nice short fun read. not too serious just flex. dope dude. good to see u color outside the lines a little and just have some fun with it __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.

08-16-2013, 01:10 PM	#13
BWHAHA Sophomore Member Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 176 Rep Power: 4754293	hey bud! this was kewl! stop trying to impress me. B-AHA-!

08-16-2013, 02:56 PM	#14
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	lol@ the tag, geezus Corrosive type, upending tracks, pencil painting leaded pictures Ventilating Venn descriptors, menstruating metascriptures ^Loved this part, br0.

08-16-2013, 03:50 PM	#15
oats Steel Cut Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 5,084 Battle Record: 19-10 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Fight Night LXXXIV - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 79005428	Appreciate the feed, for the verse and my teaching.

08-16-2013, 11:05 PM	#16
BWHAHA Sophomore Member Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 176 Rep Power: 4754293	oats can u put the quaker man avi back.. i dont think ur really oats

08-17-2013, 01:27 AM	#17
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	This shit was sick throughout the whole drop The flow was amazing it came with a great combination of couplets Smooth transition from line to line Nice drop oats keep writing __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

08-17-2013, 02:09 AM	#18
oats Steel Cut Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 5,084 Battle Record: 19-10 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Fight Night LXXXIV - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 79005428	@BWHAHA I would but then I'm afraid I might be trying to impress you :-/ but it's me, good ol oatmeal

08-17-2013, 09:22 AM	#19
ill nik-A Super Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 7,420 Battle Record: 70-25 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Battle Arena - BA Picture - Picture Battle Tournament - Netcees Battle League (3x) - Netcees Writers League (2x) - Summer Classic VI - Fall Brawl III - Netcees Battle League Season X - Lyric Olympics Rep Power: 77164519	Hipster shit was my fave line but 3rd stanza was my fave segment, nice flow, solid drop

08-17-2013, 12:37 PM	#20
Darth Yoda Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 408 Battle Record: 6-2 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF Rep Power: 20182439	lol @ this title

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