A Boastful Piece

Pharaohs Army · 05-16-2015, 05:59 PM

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Mr. J · 05-20-2015, 11:03 PM

this was an eyesore and I see why no one bothered to reply..
I feel if you came with a more constructed piece it would get views & such
but this just looks like a cluster fuck of alphabet soup and scrabble
I appreciate the dedication you possess. its needed as a writer..
but with more practice you will soon learn how to take a line like

Anatomy handed me tragedies by the count, unanimously, my family is happily trashin' me, I doubt they'd enjoy the burning of the family tree..
that's a fantasy now..

maybe that would work in long bar...or the paragraphs that people used to enjoy doing
either way I'm just rambling now because I forgot what I wanted to say
at this point...just keep writing

05-16-2015, 05:59 PM	#1
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	A Boastful Piece , Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 07-13-2016 at 09:02 PM.

05-20-2015, 11:03 PM	#2
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	this was an eyesore and I see why no one bothered to reply.. I feel if you came with a more constructed piece it would get views & such but this just looks like a cluster fuck of alphabet soup and scrabble I appreciate the dedication you possess. its needed as a writer.. but with more practice you will soon learn how to take a line like Anatomy handed me tragedies by the count, unanimously, my family is happily trashin' me, I doubt they'd enjoy the burning of the family tree.. that's a fantasy now.. maybe that would work in long bar...or the paragraphs that people used to enjoy doing either way I'm just rambling now because I forgot what I wanted to say at this point...just keep writing __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

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