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Pharaohs Army 05-16-2015 05:59 PM

A Boastful Piece
 
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Mr. J 05-20-2015 11:03 PM

this was an eyesore and I see why no one bothered to reply..
I feel if you came with a more constructed piece it would get views & such
but this just looks like a cluster fuck of alphabet soup and scrabble
I appreciate the dedication you possess. its needed as a writer..
but with more practice you will soon learn how to take a line like

Anatomy handed me tragedies by the count, unanimously, my family is happily trashin' me, I doubt they'd enjoy the burning of the family tree..
that's a fantasy now..

maybe that would work in long bar...or the paragraphs that people used to enjoy doing
either way I'm just rambling now because I forgot what I wanted to say
at this point...just keep writing


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