the queen freestyle

Dope girl · 11-26-2014, 11:00 PM

Hate it or love it,
I'm the Queen of the South.
This is for haters
I wreck anyone talking side thier mouth
Money in the bank,
This is a honey stack of doe

Mercy · 11-27-2014, 03:10 PM

So much shit to elevate on here, there was almost no flow to this at all for starters. You need to elevate on your multisyllabic rhyming as well, along with your internal rhymes. Next piece needs to be longer as well, and with an actusl concept. Overall this was not that good at all, but all it takes is elevation. Stay up

Zen · 11-27-2014, 03:33 PM

Dope. This made my thanksgiving. Thanks, dg.

Allen Knight · 11-27-2014, 04:53 PM

fireeee

Dope girl · 11-27-2014, 06:45 PM

Thanks everyone and I felt like I should add more stuff

Bodey · 11-28-2014, 01:04 AM

You probly feel like you should add more stuff

Geno · 11-28-2014, 01:39 PM

Arson

11-26-2014, 11:00 PM	#1
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,788 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521419	the queen freestyle Hate it or love it, I'm the Queen of the South. This is for haters I wreck anyone talking side thier mouth Money in the bank, This is a honey stack of doe

11-27-2014, 04:53 PM	#4
Allen Knight Foreva us, neva them. Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 9,176 Battle Record: 106-34 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Key to Greatness I - BA Cypher Tournament - Tag Team Tournament I - Fight Night LXXVI - Time to Kill V - Fight Night LXXX - 1-2 Punch League - Fight Night Cypher II - Key Grand Prix IV - NBL Cypher (7x) - Throwdown Cypher - Netcees Battle League (2x) - BA Cypher III - Fight Night 1 - Tag Team Tournament V Rep Power: 85899401	fireeee __________________ C.O.B The Bad Guys.

11-28-2014, 01:39 PM	#7
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	Arson __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

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11-27-2014, 03:10 PM	#2
Mercy Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 26 Rep Power: 0	So much shit to elevate on here, there was almost no flow to this at all for starters. You need to elevate on your multisyllabic rhyming as well, along with your internal rhymes. Next piece needs to be longer as well, and with an actusl concept. Overall this was not that good at all, but all it takes is elevation. Stay up

11-27-2014, 03:33 PM	#3
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Dope. This made my thanksgiving. Thanks, dg.

11-27-2014, 06:45 PM	#5
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,788 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521419	Thanks everyone and I felt like I should add more stuff