New Emcees(warning)

[Natural]

I'm putting the degenerates of this new generation on blast
All of you kids are unskilled sell out imitations of trash
Industry leeches seeking a fast track way to the cash
Are you a persuant of rap or a phonie robot on repetitive fads?
Are you here to be prooven or to prove you connect to a pad?
You see I'm a adaptation to the past, I do innovative in the lab
I'm competitive when I let it rip, no half ass creative pathetic shit
I step to the masses and shit in their face as the public flushes
Who needs a toilet when I can release the bull on these puppets
You pussies are beaten before I reach the stage cuz my attitudes "fuck it"
You push me just know your increasing the stakes of the game
Say bye to your sorry careers and the reputation you've gained

[PancakeBrah]

If you want, I could go in depth as to why this isn't good. In my opinion. It might be good to someone, but I don't really see how. But I probably won't. I'll just say it's not good and you can dismiss it as me hating on you for some reason.

Also; don't you think you might could release these shorter verses as a packaged open mic, a sort of compilation, and get more attention/feed? Readers skim the front page and see 5-6 open mics by one person and just look at another writers solo work. At least I do. You obviously enjoy writing, but this is a cypher post. A few other pieces you've posted are as well. Either flesh it out (give us a full 16 at least) or cypher it. Not saying you have to do this, just a suggestion. Food for thought, could be wrong.

[Natural]

Originally Posted by PancakeBrah

If you want, I could go in depth as to why this isn't good. In my opinion. It might be good to someone, but I don't really see how. But I probably won't. I'll just say it's not good and you can dismiss it as me hating on you for some reason.

Also; don't you think you might could release these shorter verses as a packaged open mic, a sort of compilation, and get more attention/feed? Readers skim the front page and see 5-6 open mics by one person and just look at another writers solo work. At least I do. You obviously enjoy writing, but this is a cypher post. A few other pieces you've posted are as well. Either flesh it out (give us a full 16 at least) or cypher it. Not saying you have to do this, just a suggestion. Food for thought, could be wrong.

@PancakeBrah
You seem somewhat genuine about what you are saying for once so, I will reply in a normal manner.
I would like to hear an honest opinion why you think this is "not good" If that requires you going in depth so be it.
I am not so ignorant to believe this is top notch witt, because witt is something I'm just now starting to really develope.
I'm inconsistent with witt....but when I nail it I nail it.

I've focused a lot on scheming....flow....at times multi's
But neglected witt
I also don't believe this is bottom teir garbage....but to each his own on that.

99% of the time you ARE hating on me....for whatever ya reason is...idc really.
It's unproductive and old. There's nothing I can really do about it but ignore it
or retort back. Neither seem to do much to resolve it.

I will ALWAYS write....I love it. I'm pretty much obcessed with it.
Nobody will take that away from me....if the Internet no longer existed
There is always paper.

I agree with you on my drops being short and they could go in the cypher.
I will heed that piece of advice and write 16 lines or more in the future.

My "mistreated" piece is 24 lines though.

[Split]

*wit

[Split]

Not trash but could be improved especially with the wording

[Natural]

Only one way to improve that
Keep writing.

However there's been PLENTY of other good drops I've produced that is slept on.
Perhaps even intentionally ignored.
I know this because I've been on plenty of other sites and I've had enough alias's and gotten far better feed.
I'm not saying I've never had anyone not like my stuff on another site....but ive got enough good feed to know I'm not garbage.

Perhaps mid teir for the moment....
At least as far as text is concerned

[Split]

So you are saying you want honest critique?

[Natural]

@Split Eight
Of coarse.
Who wouldn't want honest criticism?
I AM capable of heeding advice I agree with and discarding what I don't agree with.
Its unrealistic to think I'll agree with every piece of advice I ever get
However I'm one person to make changes when I see I need too.

No...I don't JUST want to hear the negatives of my writing
I want a positive and negative response.

Unless my drop is genuinely 100% trash....
But I haven't been that bad at writing since my first year doing it.

[big baby]

Didn't think it wasn't good. But didn't think it was amazing. Was just like he said, mid tier, I guess. There's a lot of tiers, though. heh. This was just, more of a sketch, than an actual painting. And if this is a painting of yours, it isn't great, and you could improve on very little things. Wording, and more elements added. Imagery, and so forth. All the elements you use here, just strengthen them, really. If that's the feed you're looking for. IT was great, though. If you want an honest assessment, that is.