There's a reason "oppose" rhymes with "dispose"...

Mr. J · 10-04-2013, 06:46 PM

Waiting for the truth I'm a lobbyist waiting to copy it
body it send it to where the godly live, acknowledgement
this is high treason, blind reason for the time I'm sleepin'
fly by weakened, low altitude serves the high I'm reachin'
only tragedy can battle these emotions, supply it actively
can it be...a deaf man's game, can't communicate in fantasy...
or what I percieve mentally, a enemy to my perceived tendencies
let the lesson be, let it lessen me to the point I pretend to be
adjectivally...protecting me by what proceeds me presently
allergens blessing me to the point I swallow the medicine..
please...I'm back again, parellel to where the traffic ends
armed with a magic pen, cloak & dagger the chameleon
reel me in, seal me with what projects this concealment
dealing with...X ray, til' the next game see's my best day
lady luck, lazy fuck..checkmate, Australian coffee...check mate
that's the journey..seperate ways, too much concept, let's play
voodoo hex through useful text sent from the desk...wait...
I'm just getting started...this is the highest achievement
for the blind to lead with whenever they try to reach it
silent treatment in the mind, i guess the mimes believe it
wise enough to supply a t-script...advance with diplomas
seriously hand it over, still here...bring the magnet closer
do it for science, wait until class is over

Certain · 10-05-2013, 04:04 PM

You're the most active writer on this board, and sometimes it gets tough to keep up with everything you produce. But you're usually worth a read because you have a good wit and understanding of rhyme schemes and word choice. This felt like one of your quicker writtens, but there were some fun one-liners and turns of phrase: "fly by weakened," "Australian coffee" and "do it with science."

The unifying theme seemed to be the (lack of) importance of formal education, but that wasn't too strong. That's not really the point here, though. It's nice to see you writing tighter in the Art of Writing League, but these pieces also are fun from time to time.

BWHAHA · 10-05-2013, 04:30 PM

it's really scary how your stnazas line up. actually not really scary but u know what i mean. i think htis is okay! certain is rite u do post a lot. and not to say it negatively but quality>quantity. just maybe sometimes.

Mr. J · 10-07-2013, 06:35 PM

it's all in fun...boredom is what gets me...its the end of the year
this is where it gets entertaining...

beegee · 10-08-2013, 03:02 PM

and......

dealing with...X ray, til' the next game see's my best day
lady luck, lazy fuck..checkmate, Australian coffee...check mate
that's the journey..seperate ways, too much concept, let's play
voodoo hex through useful text sent from the desk...wait...

raw.

so far all the shit I have read from you has a great flow
which is what i look for in text.
you got any links to audio?
lemme know

Eŋg · 10-08-2013, 09:44 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by BWHAHA

it's really scary how your stnazas line up.

lol.

Mr. J · 10-09-2013, 06:57 PM

No audio BG just text thinking about doing tracks
but finding a beat worthwhile is like finding God

10-04-2013, 06:46 PM	#1
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	There's a reason "oppose" rhymes with "dispose"... Waiting for the truth I'm a lobbyist waiting to copy it body it send it to where the godly live, acknowledgement this is high treason, blind reason for the time I'm sleepin' fly by weakened, low altitude serves the high I'm reachin' only tragedy can battle these emotions, supply it actively can it be...a deaf man's game, can't communicate in fantasy... or what I percieve mentally, a enemy to my perceived tendencies let the lesson be, let it lessen me to the point I pretend to be adjectivally...protecting me by what proceeds me presently allergens blessing me to the point I swallow the medicine.. please...I'm back again, parellel to where the traffic ends armed with a magic pen, cloak & dagger the chameleon reel me in, seal me with what projects this concealment dealing with...X ray, til' the next game see's my best day lady luck, lazy fuck..checkmate, Australian coffee...check mate that's the journey..seperate ways, too much concept, let's play voodoo hex through useful text sent from the desk...wait... I'm just getting started...this is the highest achievement for the blind to lead with whenever they try to reach it silent treatment in the mind, i guess the mimes believe it wise enough to supply a t-script...advance with diplomas seriously hand it over, still here...bring the magnet closer do it for science, wait until class is over __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you Last edited by Mr. J; 10-04-2013 at 10:59 PM.

10-05-2013, 04:04 PM	#2
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	You're the most active writer on this board, and sometimes it gets tough to keep up with everything you produce. But you're usually worth a read because you have a good wit and understanding of rhyme schemes and word choice. This felt like one of your quicker writtens, but there were some fun one-liners and turns of phrase: "fly by weakened," "Australian coffee" and "do it with science." The unifying theme seemed to be the (lack of) importance of formal education, but that wasn't too strong. That's not really the point here, though. It's nice to see you writing tighter in the Art of Writing League, but these pieces also are fun from time to time. __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.

10-07-2013, 06:35 PM	#4
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	it's all in fun...boredom is what gets me...its the end of the year this is where it gets entertaining... __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

10-09-2013, 06:57 PM	#7
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	No audio BG just text thinking about doing tracks but finding a beat worthwhile is like finding God __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

10-05-2013, 04:30 PM	#3
BWHAHA Sophomore Member Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 176 Rep Power: 4754293	it's really scary how your stnazas line up. actually not really scary but u know what i mean. i think htis is okay! certain is rite u do post a lot. and not to say it negatively but quality>quantity. just maybe sometimes.

10-08-2013, 03:02 PM	#5
beegee Member Join Date: Sep 2013 Posts: 32 Rep Power: 0	and...... dealing with...X ray, til' the next game see's my best day lady luck, lazy fuck..checkmate, Australian coffee...check mate that's the journey..seperate ways, too much concept, let's play voodoo hex through useful text sent from the desk...wait... raw. so far all the shit I have read from you has a great flow which is what i look for in text. you got any links to audio? lemme know