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Mr. J 10-04-2013 06:46 PM

There's a reason "oppose" rhymes with "dispose"...
 
Waiting for the truth I'm a lobbyist waiting to copy it
body it send it to where the godly live, acknowledgement
this is high treason, blind reason for the time I'm sleepin'
fly by weakened, low altitude serves the high I'm reachin'
only tragedy can battle these emotions, supply it actively
can it be...a deaf man's game, can't communicate in fantasy...
or what I percieve mentally, a enemy to my perceived tendencies
let the lesson be, let it lessen me to the point I pretend to be
adjectivally...protecting me by what proceeds me presently
allergens blessing me to the point I swallow the medicine..
please...I'm back again, parellel to where the traffic ends
armed with a magic pen, cloak & dagger the chameleon
reel me in, seal me with what projects this concealment
dealing with...X ray, til' the next game see's my best day
lady luck, lazy fuck..checkmate, Australian coffee...check mate
that's the journey..seperate ways, too much concept, let's play
voodoo hex through useful text sent from the desk...wait...
I'm just getting started...this is the highest achievement
for the blind to lead with whenever they try to reach it
silent treatment in the mind, i guess the mimes believe it
wise enough to supply a t-script...advance with diplomas
seriously hand it over, still here...bring the magnet closer
do it for science, wait until class is over

Certain 10-05-2013 04:04 PM

You're the most active writer on this board, and sometimes it gets tough to keep up with everything you produce. But you're usually worth a read because you have a good wit and understanding of rhyme schemes and word choice. This felt like one of your quicker writtens, but there were some fun one-liners and turns of phrase: "fly by weakened," "Australian coffee" and "do it with science."

The unifying theme seemed to be the (lack of) importance of formal education, but that wasn't too strong. That's not really the point here, though. It's nice to see you writing tighter in the Art of Writing League, but these pieces also are fun from time to time.

BWHAHA 10-05-2013 04:30 PM

it's really scary how your stnazas line up. actually not really scary but u know what i mean. i think htis is okay! certain is rite u do post a lot. and not to say it negatively but quality>quantity. just maybe sometimes.

Mr. J 10-07-2013 06:35 PM

it's all in fun...boredom is what gets me...its the end of the year
this is where it gets entertaining...

beegee 10-08-2013 03:02 PM

and......

dealing with...X ray, til' the next game see's my best day
lady luck, lazy fuck..checkmate, Australian coffee...check mate
that's the journey..seperate ways, too much concept, let's play
voodoo hex through useful text sent from the desk...wait...

raw.

so far all the shit I have read from you has a great flow
which is what i look for in text.
you got any links to audio?
lemme know

Eŋg 10-08-2013 09:44 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by BWHAHA (Post 169940)
it's really scary how your stnazas line up.

lol.

Mr. J 10-09-2013 06:57 PM

No audio BG just text thinking about doing tracks
but finding a beat worthwhile is like finding God


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