Round One: razah vs. Innovator [OPEN FOR VOTES]

Adonis · 01-02-2016, 01:08 PM

Winter Topical II: Round One

SUMMARY OF RULES:

Verses are due JAN. 11th
MONDAY at 9 P.M. Pacific/West Coast or MONDAY 11:59 PM Eastern / 6:00 AM TUESDAY JAN. 12th Central European/London
There are NO extensions.

Verses MUST be a minimum 10 lines or a maximum of 48 lines (or 650 words).

Votes are due Thursday at 4:00 p.m. Western / or Thursday 7:00 PM Eastern / 1:00 AM Friday Central European/London Failure to vote will result in NEGATIVE VOTES if you advance to the next round.

WHAT DOES THIS MEAN? You can technically start a match down three votes by failing to log a single vote the previous week.

so....

All competitors must vote on THREE battles

Read the full rules here!

Topic:

Gluck

@Razah @Innovator

Inno · 01-02-2016, 04:38 PM

This feels good

Razah · 01-02-2016, 06:41 PM

Word.

http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=122401
http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=122396
http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=122388

Inno · 01-08-2016, 07:59 PM

Bill now bagels eat satin laced pussy shavings
Told a storie bout juicy haven gluten craving
Booty shaking pussy poppin teen bitches

Eating caviar swinging battle stars at yah car
Frodo going world star. By far the type of nigga
Who gives out scars and loose stitches

He would 2 finger bitches like bowling ball hitches
1 in the stink putting hoes in a pinch, driving in every inch
Jeez he's a beast, barbaric coal hearted anti Semitic
Swallowing sedatives by each tick of the pendulum

Razah · 01-11-2016, 07:31 PM

Saw the topic & laughed. 'Cuz in this city of mine
I see 'em gasp, they can't breathe, they need an oxygen mask
Can't stop to relax it's like it's splitting their spine
The pressure they feel won't fit in a lyric of mine
The prize is to live with their foes disguised as their kin
Feels like no future in sight with their eyes on their six
I could've made it poetic, how life shouldn't be still
Would've been a beautiful written but it wouldn't be real
In hindsight, I'm glad I caught a glimpse from the distance
& noticed there's no hope for all the prisons they live in
What's the solution I seek when fear's forever lurking
Innovations had my hopes high, now, it clearly isn't working
I used to think it was them, being too nervous to take it
Overwhelmed by the thought, satisfaction's just a word they created
Then reality hit, all they ever felt was resistance
Between them & I, I .. I really couldn't tell you the difference

'Da fuck is hope.

Cimmerian · 01-11-2016, 09:27 PM

I vote for Razah. I thought both of y'all dodged the topic. But Razah wrote a better verse.

Cimm.

NYCSPITZ · 01-11-2016, 09:57 PM

Inno you brought some lulz but it was basically more of a loose sex metaphor than a real written. Feel like you keyed this.

Razah brought some heat into a small verse. Nice switch up to the rhyme at the beginning, a hint of early braggadocio then an intricate connection to the topic. I was more enthralled with this verse than Inno's.

V/ razah

MMLP · 01-12-2016, 10:28 AM

Very short battle which surprised me, its only right I keep it brief
Vote goes to Raz, stuck to topic more, overall better writing and read imo.

P.S. was waiting for raz to use ‘innovate’ in some shape or form! keep that up if u win lol

Diode · 01-12-2016, 11:01 AM

I have no idea what Inno was going for here. Underestimated his opponent? It wasn't even funny just.. awkward.

Read Razah's verse in Chance the Rapper's voice and fell in love with it. Nothing special lyrically, but the rhyme schemes were on point and actually had some kind of relationship with the picture. Actually, way impressed with his content in retrospect. Solid effort.

v/ Razah

Pinot Grij · 01-12-2016, 11:54 AM

Inno - you didn't really care enough to write a verse, so I don't really care enough to break down my vote.

Razah - stuck to the topic - straightforward contemplation piece. The rapid fire prose style I felt added to your paranoia/distrust angle. Liked the "lyric" line and the repetition of "I" in the final line.

Vote -- Razah

UnbornBuddha · 01-13-2016, 01:22 AM

Lol, at Inno. I don't know what to say. You are capable of much better.

Razah: Yes, this was very rapid. And the beginning has a lot of character to it. You always manage to write minimally and yet always sneak on by to the semi's. You are an under the radar writer, but you write poignantly, to the point. I liked the piece, the beginning and middle felt kind of different though, almost like two different writers, but it meshed well.

Vote: Razah

Adonis · 01-13-2016, 06:51 PM

Razah Flawless 6-0

01-02-2016, 01:08 PM	#1
Adonis Tsk Tsk Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: Beer Goggles Posts: 4,834 Battle Record: 36-34 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - NFL Pick'em 2016-17 Rep Power: 9946449	Round One: razah vs. Innovator [OPEN FOR VOTES] Winter Topical II: Round One SUMMARY OF RULES: Verses are due JAN. 11th MONDAY at 9 P.M. Pacific/West Coast or MONDAY 11:59 PM Eastern / 6:00 AM TUESDAY JAN. 12th Central European/London There are NO extensions. Verses MUST be a minimum 10 lines or a maximum of 48 lines (or 650 words). Votes are due Thursday at 4:00 p.m. Western / or Thursday 7:00 PM Eastern / 1:00 AM Friday Central European/London Failure to vote will result in NEGATIVE VOTES if you advance to the next round. WHAT DOES THIS MEAN? You can technically start a match down three votes by failing to log a single vote the previous week. so.... All competitors must vote on THREE battles Read the full rules here! Topic: Gluck @Razah @Innovator __________________ I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is TUPAC SHAKUR Last edited by Adonis; 01-11-2016 at 07:53 PM.

01-02-2016, 06:41 PM	#3
Razah rockkFresh Join Date: Apr 2015 Location: Chicago. Posts: 1,088 Battle Record: 8-10 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 11328545	Word. http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=122401 http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=122396 http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=122388 Last edited by Razah; 01-12-2016 at 08:37 PM.

01-11-2016, 09:57 PM	#7
NYCSPITZ SYRACUSE Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,031 Battle Record: 31-37 Champed - Write Night II - Alias Topical Tournament Rep Power: 4743547	Inno you brought some lulz but it was basically more of a loose sex metaphor than a real written. Feel like you keyed this. Razah brought some heat into a small verse. Nice switch up to the rhyme at the beginning, a hint of early braggadocio then an intricate connection to the topic. I was more enthralled with this verse than Inno's. V/ razah __________________ UNIFIED THEORY

01-12-2016, 11:01 AM	#9
Diode PR's Finest Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 14,165 Battle Record: 12-7 Rep Power: 85899410	I have no idea what Inno was going for here. Underestimated his opponent? It wasn't even funny just.. awkward. Read Razah's verse in Chance the Rapper's voice and fell in love with it. Nothing special lyrically, but the rhyme schemes were on point and actually had some kind of relationship with the picture. Actually, way impressed with his content in retrospect. Solid effort. v/ Razah __________________

01-12-2016, 11:54 AM	#10
Pinot Grij Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 863 Battle Record: 23-19 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night 2 - Write Week V - Netcees Battle League (2x) - Winter Topical II - 1-2 Punch league Rep Power: 29195064	Inno - you didn't really care enough to write a verse, so I don't really care enough to break down my vote. Razah - stuck to the topic - straightforward contemplation piece. The rapid fire prose style I felt added to your paranoia/distrust angle. Liked the "lyric" line and the repetition of "I" in the final line. Vote -- Razah __________________ Topical C.R.E.A.M.

01-02-2016, 04:38 PM	#2
Inno Ad mini tator Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 10,024 Battle Record: 26-54 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - Black August - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 85899403	This feels good

01-08-2016, 07:59 PM	#4
Inno Ad mini tator Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 10,024 Battle Record: 26-54 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - Black August - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 85899403	Bill now bagels eat satin laced pussy shavings Told a storie bout juicy haven gluten craving Booty shaking pussy poppin teen bitches Eating caviar swinging battle stars at yah car Frodo going world star. By far the type of nigga Who gives out scars and loose stitches He would 2 finger bitches like bowling ball hitches 1 in the stink putting hoes in a pinch, driving in every inch Jeez he's a beast, barbaric coal hearted anti Semitic Swallowing sedatives by each tick of the pendulum

01-11-2016, 07:31 PM	#5
Razah rockkFresh Join Date: Apr 2015 Location: Chicago. Posts: 1,088 Battle Record: 8-10 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 11328545	Saw the topic & laughed. 'Cuz in this city of mine I see 'em gasp, they can't breathe, they need an oxygen mask Can't stop to relax it's like it's splitting their spine The pressure they feel won't fit in a lyric of mine The prize is to live with their foes disguised as their kin Feels like no future in sight with their eyes on their six I could've made it poetic, how life shouldn't be still Would've been a beautiful written but it wouldn't be real In hindsight, I'm glad I caught a glimpse from the distance & noticed there's no hope for all the prisons they live in What's the solution I seek when fear's forever lurking Innovations had my hopes high, now, it clearly isn't working I used to think it was them, being too nervous to take it Overwhelmed by the thought, satisfaction's just a word they created Then reality hit, all they ever felt was resistance Between them & I, I .. I really couldn't tell you the difference 'Da fuck is hope.

01-11-2016, 09:27 PM	#6
Cimmerian Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2013 Posts: 142 Rep Power: 2933498	I vote for Razah. I thought both of y'all dodged the topic. But Razah wrote a better verse. Cimm.

01-12-2016, 10:28 AM	#8
MMLP Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 614 Battle Record: 15-16 Champed - Write Week 9 Rep Power: 9768091	Very short battle which surprised me, its only right I keep it brief Vote goes to Raz, stuck to topic more, overall better writing and read imo. P.S. was waiting for raz to use ‘innovate’ in some shape or form! keep that up if u win lol

01-13-2016, 01:22 AM	#11
UnbornBuddha Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,008 Battle Record: 23-10 Champed - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 5 Rep Power: 23856379	Lol, at Inno. I don't know what to say. You are capable of much better. Razah: Yes, this was very rapid. And the beginning has a lot of character to it. You always manage to write minimally and yet always sneak on by to the semi's. You are an under the radar writer, but you write poignantly, to the point. I liked the piece, the beginning and middle felt kind of different though, almost like two different writers, but it meshed well. Vote: Razah

01-13-2016, 06:51 PM	#12
Adonis Tsk Tsk Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: Beer Goggles Posts: 4,834 Battle Record: 36-34 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - NFL Pick'em 2016-17 Rep Power: 9946449	Razah Flawless 6-0 __________________ I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is TUPAC SHAKUR