I'm in the mood to write

ill nik-A · 08-16-2013, 04:24 PM

I’m in a writing kinda mood, but while I’m deciding what to do…
I’m guiding lines to choose what type of driving I should skew
the lighting’s right but new, so darkness whispers opportunity
ideas blowing in the wind as the hardest blizzard caused a unity
the illness has immunity, diagnosed insane with a cold to blame
happy trails lost in a road to pain while drunk drivers mold the lane
we pray for gold in vain then scold our shame as denial preaches
the style leaches on to a bond so strong it brings a smile to Jesus
get the wild to greet us, animal instincts tamed by circus acts
curse the facts, a sinister’s joke is usually followed by a nervous laugh
the purpose asked… nosey people breathe when neighbors lie
house warming gifts include cherry flavored pie & a favor pried
which dictator’s shy? appetite for destruction while the waiter cries
look up at the creator’s sky, I cloned his tree for a greater high
I got a sailor’s eye, fishing for compliments in a sea of verbs
I’ve seen you stirred, my writing mood’s over so I’ll free the words

Mr. J · 08-17-2013, 01:34 AM

This was a dope piece my dude...enjoyable flow
Captivating in fact. I might edit in more praise later
But it was great

Geno · 08-17-2013, 09:11 PM

A different view into the nikas mind.

This is a little more abstract than what I'm used to from you. Felt very random and like you just were really going off of the instinct to write with no direction. Last few lines were where I felt like you started to gain a real momentum into something and then it ends.

house warming gifts include cherry flavored pie & a favor pried which dictator’s shy? appetite for destruction while the waitercries look up at the creator’s sky, I cloned his tree for a greater high I got a sailor’s eye, fishing forcomplimentsin a seaof verbs I’ve seen you stirred, my writing mood’s over so I’ll free the words

That shit was my fav segment. The rest felt like a slow descriptive start leading up to a hotter and more abruptly ended climax. Should went in further imo

Good read, nika

ill nik-A · 08-19-2013, 03:59 AM

Can I get more feed

manikal · 08-19-2013, 08:08 AM

nice multies + good progression from bar to bar

appetite for destruction while the
waiter cries

^^ ... loved the expression in this bar ... not much to say,only wish it was a longer piece

CopyPat · 08-20-2013, 04:13 AM

hahah cool man. i can dig it. u obviously obviously know what ur doing as far as texting goes. not sure if u ever attempted or considered attempting some audio shit?? you have a writing style that would be conducive to making tracks cause all ur bars are similar length etc... you keep the rhythm nicely. would be dope to hear u spit something man

ill nik-A · 08-20-2013, 07:02 AM

Funny thing I did audio before text, I'm passed that stage, I enjoy the writing aspect of it more, thx for the feed guys

Geno · 08-20-2013, 10:07 AM

Collab?
Can't believe we've never spoke of one before. Let's make it happen

ill nik-A · 08-20-2013, 10:45 AM

Sure man, anytime

Exis · 08-20-2013, 11:11 AM

Yeah your multies are off the hook here, what I like mostly though is how none are forced...made for an extremely fluent read.Thought content was good also, you never drifted and kept it consistently nice thru-out...so kudos.

Enjoyable shit, stay upwards.

08-16-2013, 04:24 PM	#1
ill nik-A Super Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 7,420 Battle Record: 70-25 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Battle Arena - BA Picture - Picture Battle Tournament - Netcees Battle League (3x) - Netcees Writers League (2x) - Summer Classic VI - Fall Brawl III - Netcees Battle League Season X - Lyric Olympics Rep Power: 77164519	I'm in the mood to write I’m in a writing kinda mood, but while I’m deciding what to do… I’m guiding lines to choose what type of driving I should skew the lighting’s right but new, so darkness whispers opportunity ideas blowing in the wind as the hardest blizzard caused a unity the illness has immunity, diagnosed insane with a cold to blame happy trails lost in a road to pain while drunk drivers mold the lane we pray for gold in vain then scold our shame as denial preaches the style leaches on to a bond so strong it brings a smile to Jesus get the wild to greet us, animal instincts tamed by circus acts curse the facts, a sinister’s joke is usually followed by a nervous laugh the purpose asked… nosey people breathe when neighbors lie house warming gifts include cherry flavored pie & a favor pried which dictator’s shy? appetite for destruction while the waiter cries look up at the creator’s sky, I cloned his tree for a greater high I got a sailor’s eye, fishing for compliments in a sea of verbs I’ve seen you stirred, my writing mood’s over so I’ll free the words

08-17-2013, 01:34 AM	#2
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	This was a dope piece my dude...enjoyable flow Captivating in fact. I might edit in more praise later But it was great __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

08-17-2013, 09:11 PM	#3
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	A different view into the nikas mind. This is a little more abstract than what I'm used to from you. Felt very random and like you just were really going off of the instinct to write with no direction. Last few lines were where I felt like you started to gain a real momentum into something and then it ends. house warming gifts include cherry flavored pie & a favor pried which dictator’s shy? appetite for destruction while the waitercries look up at the creator’s sky, I cloned his tree for a greater high I got a sailor’s eye, fishing forcomplimentsin a seaof verbs I’ve seen you stirred, my writing mood’s over so I’ll free the words That shit was my fav segment. The rest felt like a slow descriptive start leading up to a hotter and more abruptly ended climax. Should went in further imo Good read, nika __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

08-20-2013, 04:13 AM	#6
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	hahah cool man. i can dig it. u obviously obviously know what ur doing as far as texting goes. not sure if u ever attempted or considered attempting some audio shit?? you have a writing style that would be conducive to making tracks cause all ur bars are similar length etc... you keep the rhythm nicely. would be dope to hear u spit something man __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.

08-20-2013, 10:07 AM	#8
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	Collab? Can't believe we've never spoke of one before. Let's make it happen __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

08-19-2013, 03:59 AM	#4
ill nik-A Super Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 7,420 Battle Record: 70-25 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Battle Arena - BA Picture - Picture Battle Tournament - Netcees Battle League (3x) - Netcees Writers League (2x) - Summer Classic VI - Fall Brawl III - Netcees Battle League Season X - Lyric Olympics Rep Power: 77164519	Can I get more feed

08-19-2013, 08:08 AM	#5
manikal Ageless mc Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 21 Rep Power: 37	nice multies + good progression from bar to bar appetite for destruction while the waiter cries ^^ ... loved the expression in this bar ... not much to say,only wish it was a longer piece

08-20-2013, 07:02 AM	#7
ill nik-A Super Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 7,420 Battle Record: 70-25 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Battle Arena - BA Picture - Picture Battle Tournament - Netcees Battle League (3x) - Netcees Writers League (2x) - Summer Classic VI - Fall Brawl III - Netcees Battle League Season X - Lyric Olympics Rep Power: 77164519	Funny thing I did audio before text, I'm passed that stage, I enjoy the writing aspect of it more, thx for the feed guys

08-20-2013, 10:45 AM	#9
ill nik-A Super Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 7,420 Battle Record: 70-25 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Battle Arena - BA Picture - Picture Battle Tournament - Netcees Battle League (3x) - Netcees Writers League (2x) - Summer Classic VI - Fall Brawl III - Netcees Battle League Season X - Lyric Olympics Rep Power: 77164519	Sure man, anytime

08-20-2013, 11:11 AM	#10
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,934 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Yeah your multies are off the hook here, what I like mostly though is how none are forced...made for an extremely fluent read.Thought content was good also, you never drifted and kept it consistently nice thru-out...so kudos. Enjoyable shit, stay upwards.