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12-08-2014, 10:28 AM
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when a guy say poem
When a guy say I'm cold
he wants a hug When say I'm sleepy he want you to be his pillow when a guy smiles you brighten up his day when a guy say I'm lonely he wants love and a homie when a guy say you beautiful he attracted to your beauty when a guy say the word comfort he wants to love you |
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12-08-2014, 12:17 PM
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White Earl
Join Date: Jan 2013
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When a guy says im lonely
He wants love and a homie Flamessssss
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12-08-2014, 02:01 PM
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ty
thhanks
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12-09-2014, 11:21 AM
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bitch this was terrible. down syndrome or not.
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12-09-2014, 02:19 PM
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Razor-thin derision
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Nice work, my lord.
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12-09-2014, 05:09 PM
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thanks v
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12-12-2014, 01:41 PM
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The Clown Prince
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I feel like the first half was from the heart
the second half almost outdid what I said bout the start when you said 'you brighten up his day' that was hard sometimes I feel like its hard to even decipher your bars but...'when a guy say your beautiful' that was raw 'he attracted to your beauty' I was like OH MY GOD... nicely done...
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