Why did the chicken cross the road? Because chickens can't fly and crucifixions are better on the ground.

big baby · 12-23-2013, 01:42 AM

Indebted to you, I’m not God. Peripheral view.
My mantra, metacarpus’s brew a love-plot
While the record ensues its heartthrob
I fell into you. I’m penning to Louie Armstrong.
A lesson adieu. In Starry Night, designing bionic pylons
where thee iconic axons, gnaw fiber through
protoplasmic ions. This is neural slashing eyebombs.
Call the coach of Ivan Draga. *sigh*
How am I supposed to be over you
Alone in his room, while I could be partying all night long
La vie en rose. Charming, purple neon glows
Silhouetted through ionic eon poems.
Look at your naughty, ‘she’s hot’ pose.
Where you know I can hardly keep on prose
I’ll go places, where the heart’ll seldom push
Where guards of emblems crush, every part you’d think you look
You’re an art piece. An arc of spectrum color hybrid
Where bows rain tinted arrows over refracted fuller violet.
Isaac Asimov, where the unvarying angles off.
Wish you a good twilight. In the blink of an eye, its dark
Your indie wavelength whirs the coloration champion
That stirs a combination halcyon through this inky apex

NYCSPITZ · 12-23-2013, 01:49 AM

7.666 repeating/10, it had its zany zeniths and anti-ascension agonies...you have top 5 internet flow along with myself and dead man and your content intrigues but it feels to me like grasping for straws at various moments, interspersed with various brilliancies. consistency is key, don't be lazy with it, it can sound smart but be stupid and vice versa

Eŋg · 12-23-2013, 02:03 AM

tu parles francais? j'adore quand tu parles francais.

PancakeBrah · 12-23-2013, 04:29 PM

Is this accentual wording? I'm so confused.

Another fun read. I would break down further but I don't want to. Its good. You write good stuff. Good job. I liked the rhymes. Except the ode to photosynthesis. Or protons. Or whatever that shit was. Rhymes were still fun during that.

big baby · 12-23-2013, 09:16 PM

@Totoro *flicks forehead*
@oXus eh, when I'm feeling froggy. And I do as well. My friend speaks it and she sounds lovely while doing so.
@PancakeBrah Fair enough. And ehh, to an extent of course it is. :)

Wise Wiggles · 12-23-2013, 09:26 PM

I love (<3) this.
dang it man.

12-23-2013, 01:42 AM	#1
big baby obsessed Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: fucka idiyote Posts: 5,709 Battle Record: Faggot-1 Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2 Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2 - was candidate for gerber baby 3x - smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote" - smush beer on head and didn't cry - parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once - when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan - won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a - neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper - set neighbor house on fire lmao - fuck neighbor husband and wife - first fish caught resembled david ortiz - colin kaepernick - related to genghis khan - elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club - never lost game of hide and seek Rep Power: 8599682	Why did the chicken cross the road? Because chickens can't fly and crucifixions are better on the ground. Indebted to you, I’m not God. Peripheral view. My mantra, metacarpus’s brew a love-plot While the record ensues its heartthrob I fell into you. I’m penning to Louie Armstrong. A lesson adieu. In Starry Night, designing bionic pylons where thee iconic axons, gnaw fiber through protoplasmic ions. This is neural slashing eyebombs. Call the coach of Ivan Draga. sigh How am I supposed to be over you Alone in his room, while I could be partying all night long La vie en rose. Charming, purple neon glows Silhouetted through ionic eon poems. Look at your naughty, ‘she’s hot’ pose. Where you know I can hardly keep on prose I’ll go places, where the heart’ll seldom push Where guards of emblems crush, every part you’d think you look You’re an art piece. An arc of spectrum color hybrid Where bows rain tinted arrows over refracted fuller violet. Isaac Asimov, where the unvarying angles off. Wish you a good twilight. In the blink of an eye, its dark Your indie wavelength whirs the coloration champion That stirs a combination halcyon through this inky apex Last edited by big baby; 12-23-2013 at 09:16 PM.

12-23-2013, 09:26 PM	#6
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,505 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788022	I love (<3) this. dang it man. __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

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12-23-2013, 01:49 AM	#2
NYCSPITZ SYRACUSE Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,031 Battle Record: 31-37 Champed - Write Night II - Alias Topical Tournament Rep Power: 4743547	7.666 repeating/10, it had its zany zeniths and anti-ascension agonies...you have top 5 internet flow along with myself and dead man and your content intrigues but it feels to me like grasping for straws at various moments, interspersed with various brilliancies. consistency is key, don't be lazy with it, it can sound smart but be stupid and vice versa

12-23-2013, 02:03 AM	#3
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	tu parles francais? j'adore quand tu parles francais.

12-23-2013, 04:29 PM	#4
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	Is this accentual wording? I'm so confused. Another fun read. I would break down further but I don't want to. Its good. You write good stuff. Good job. I liked the rhymes. Except the ode to photosynthesis. Or protons. Or whatever that shit was. Rhymes were still fun during that.

12-23-2013, 09:16 PM	#5
big baby obsessed Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: fucka idiyote Posts: 5,709 Battle Record: Faggot-1 Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2 Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2 - was candidate for gerber baby 3x - smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote" - smush beer on head and didn't cry - parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once - when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan - won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a - neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper - set neighbor house on fire lmao - fuck neighbor husband and wife - first fish caught resembled david ortiz - colin kaepernick - related to genghis khan - elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club - never lost game of hide and seek Rep Power: 8599682	@Totoro flicks forehead @oXus eh, when I'm feeling froggy. And I do as well. My friend speaks it and she sounds lovely while doing so. @PancakeBrah Fair enough. And ehh, to an extent of course it is. :)