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big baby 12-23-2013 01:42 AM

Why did the chicken cross the road? Because chickens can't fly and crucifixions are better on the ground.
 
Indebted to you, I’m not God. Peripheral view.
My mantra, metacarpus’s brew a love-plot
While the record ensues its heartthrob
I fell into you. I’m penning to Louie Armstrong.
A lesson adieu. In Starry Night, designing bionic pylons
where thee iconic axons, gnaw fiber through
protoplasmic ions. This is neural slashing eyebombs.
Call the coach of Ivan Draga. *sigh*
How am I supposed to be over you
Alone in his room, while I could be partying all night long
La vie en rose. Charming, purple neon glows
Silhouetted through ionic eon poems.
Look at your naughty, ‘she’s hot’ pose.
Where you know I can hardly keep on prose
I’ll go places, where the heart’ll seldom push
Where guards of emblems crush, every part you’d think you look
You’re an art piece. An arc of spectrum color hybrid
Where bows rain tinted arrows over refracted fuller violet.
Isaac Asimov, where the unvarying angles off.
Wish you a good twilight. In the blink of an eye, its dark
Your indie wavelength whirs the coloration champion
That stirs a combination halcyon through this inky apex

NYCSPITZ 12-23-2013 01:49 AM

7.666 repeating/10, it had its zany zeniths and anti-ascension agonies...you have top 5 internet flow along with myself and dead man and your content intrigues but it feels to me like grasping for straws at various moments, interspersed with various brilliancies. consistency is key, don't be lazy with it, it can sound smart but be stupid and vice versa

Eŋg 12-23-2013 02:03 AM

tu parles francais? j'adore quand tu parles francais.

PancakeBrah 12-23-2013 04:29 PM

Is this accentual wording? I'm so confused.

Another fun read. I would break down further but I don't want to. Its good. You write good stuff. Good job. I liked the rhymes. Except the ode to photosynthesis. Or protons. Or whatever that shit was. Rhymes were still fun during that.

big baby 12-23-2013 09:16 PM

@Totoro *flicks forehead*
@oXus eh, when I'm feeling froggy. And I do as well. My friend speaks it and she sounds lovely while doing so.
@PancakeBrah Fair enough. And ehh, to an extent of course it is. :)

Wise Wiggles 12-23-2013 09:26 PM

I love (<3) this.
dang it man.


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