a.m. showers

Split · 11-27-2013, 08:10 AM

i'd love you to keep walking
in the rain, you listen to the cloud cover
instead of holding a grudge-
-you are secretly cold,
i know because i am, too, cold,
i will probably rephrase my array of captions-
a study of art- "vanished perspectives"
those thousands of abstract points
near and yet far- the sort of thing to put behind you
as this world is too pretty an abstraction to chase
in the way i have spent too much time watching the rain

will feed later today srs ive been slacking.

Wise Wiggles · 11-27-2013, 08:20 AM

Poems!

yay

ill nik-A · 11-27-2013, 09:16 AM

Meh ok for what it is

To me it's vague

The vanished perspectives was the highlight just not captivating no pun intended

Inno · 11-27-2013, 09:35 PM

This makes me want to write some man poems

PancakeBrah · 11-27-2013, 09:48 PM

i will probably rephrase my array of captions-

good one.

Vulgar · 12-07-2013, 01:58 PM

I agree with nik's "meh" comment. It wasn't generous. I wanted moar. I wanted moar moar.

Keep doing fume

Cimmerian · 12-07-2013, 06:51 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Split Eight

in the rain, you listen to the cloud cover
instead of holding a grudge-
-you are secretly cold,
i know because i am, too,

Particularly liked this run. Keep doing.

Cimm

11-27-2013, 08:10 AM	#1
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,898 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899398	a.m. showers i'd love you to keep walking in the rain, you listen to the cloud cover instead of holding a grudge- -you are secretly cold, i know because i am, too, cold, i will probably rephrase my array of captions- a study of art- "vanished perspectives" those thousands of abstract points near and yet far- the sort of thing to put behind you as this world is too pretty an abstraction to chase in the way i have spent too much time watching the rain will feed later today srs ive been slacking. __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com

11-27-2013, 08:20 AM	#2
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,505 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788022	Poems! yay __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

11-27-2013, 09:16 AM	#3
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11-27-2013, 09:35 PM	#4
Inno Ad mini tator Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 10,025 Battle Record: 26-54 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - Black August - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 85899403	This makes me want to write some man poems

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Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	I agree with nik's "meh" comment. It wasn't generous. I wanted moar. I wanted moar moar. Keep doing fume