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chewin skin off my cheeks, passin up the moment
fluidly it leaks as it scratches me to hold it too much interwoven bullshit boiling the stove pit wrists growin swollen, soiling me sewn-in strollin down the block, puffin herbal medicines stolen by my thoughts, grab a journal, reminisce molded to be mocked: an infernal nemesis smokin too much pot.. choked-up purple messages a passenger of a fascist curse, no sash or girth self-destructive massacre mixed with flasks of worth the past is dirt.. oh unmask me, Earth get me back on the track with the laughs that hurt
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05-20-2015, 10:53 PM
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strollin down the block, puffin herbal medicines
stolen by my thoughts, grab a journal, reminisce molded to be mocked: an infernal nemesis smokin too much pot.. choked-up purple messages ^^^ this little section is smooth, I'm impressed by this I often enjoy reading your works when I'm in the mood and when I see you pull something off like that, I see hope I also quite liked after 'sash & girth' or however that went the line following massacre is quite well, this is an improvement you seem more controlled. as a matter of fact... I can easily masterbate to this
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05-23-2015, 07:10 AM
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Haha thx for the feed. And idk if it's really improvement. I just feel like my brain doesn't have a cloudiness anymore. It's finally free
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